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i love vaseline on September 2, 2005Yeah on rereading it, the swearing isn't all that bad, but I think maybe you need to spread it out more, not so many fucks close together...(haha)...it's not that I think they're offensive or nowt, it's just you shouldn't use any word too much too close. It is a real good write though, particularly the opening.
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CoolHandLuke on September 2, 2005Hey thanks for your critique, I think the cussing was effective in my mind...it was overused and played out, sort of like the addiction I was trying to write about. Thanks for your words doll.
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i love vaseline on July 11, 2005damn straight! i'm impressed to find another enthusiast
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vaseline on July 8, 2005vaseline kicks ass
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Daniela Violin on July 5, 2005hehe, I was wondering if you were Jane (vaseline) and just changed your name but wow, someone else with vaseline in their name... haha, I'll read up on you.
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vaseline on June 23, 2005all hail vaseline
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