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Pieces Of Darkness on June 22, 2006(was faiths in pieces)
*MEOWS* *tackles* I MISSED YOU! -
Beautiful-Mistake on December 9, 2005ahh how I love nirvana...teen-spirit has to be the best cover song they've ever done...
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Pieces Of Darkness on October 3, 2005*tackles* i missed you
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wanderer2 on July 31, 2005Don't you worry
Don't you fret
Cause you aint seen nothin yet
But don't ever give up
the person you may find
may be you
and I can tell
I'ts BEAUTIFUL -
Pieces Of Darkness on July 14, 2005Im not Faiths in pieces anymore i aint been for a while i am now, Pieces of darkness.
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robert bolin on July 7, 2005I never said kill muslims i said in my words kill benny boy and when the snake the serpant resends back into hell - and if i was to disagree my words wouldnt be nukem it would be more march the fuck in and rip their fucken heads off.
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ShadowStalker on April 16, 2005You look like a cool guy from your picture at top...ha ha ha
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Pieces Of Darkness on April 15, 2005MEOW
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sELf DeSTroYeR on March 30, 2005hey, thx 4 ur comment. i've never thought that somebody will like it. (btw i'm really good in english, i started 2 learn it some years ago, but i still cant speak it well) lol. anyway, thx. Ana
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AzureBlue on March 26, 2005Hi Becca! I want to invite you to join the hardest rocking group on AP, ALL METAL!!! I see that you like a lot of awesome bands!
Just click on >>> http://allpoetry.com/Poem/828761 <<< to find out how to join!
I hope to see you there!
\m/
Lorena -
JonKohan on March 22, 2005Hi i didn't want to put this in your poem and take points that i don't deserve and i didn't want everybody that reads the song to read this. anyways here is your song i rewrote for you. first with the chours, this is how yours went:
Chorus
That's why i sit here
day after day
wishing my life away
and again I find myself
with the blade in my hand
cutting at my wrists
deeper and deeper
until things become hazy
and I start to feel dizzy
and this is how mine goes:
Chours:
That's why i sit here
day after day
wishing my life away
and again I find myself
/Connecting my arm to the blade/
i'm taking a hard look
at this life i have made
and it just doesn't look the same
as it use too
i feel since the chours has is said twice it has to be the best part since you're reading it two times. this line /Connecting my arm to the blade/ i wrote like that because i fits but at the same time doesn't fit, confused, yeah it's okay. so i put it inbetween the lines so it would be like the back up singers line. anyways now for the verses here's yours:
Verse 1
I'm drunk and I'm stoned
I feel so alone
Running from it all.
I can no longer hide
I've got to face up to the facts
My life is not all that.
and now the one i came up with:
Verse 1:
i'm drunk--- i'm stoned
and i still feel so alone
i just can't hold it in anymore
i've got to face the facts about my life
i've found death and lost happness
this just isn't right
it's basicly the one you wrote just edited a little bit and a few different ideas thrown into it. for the second verse i totaly re-did it (sorry) i tryed to keep some lines in it but i just couldn't get it to work. i did keep the idea of what you were trying to say i just used different words. so here is how yours went:
Verse 2
I'm destroying myself slowly
if only I could be happy
but one day soon
I may go too far
and the final cut
will be the deepest scar
and of course mine:
Verse 2:
i'm decaying inch by inch
each and every single day
and nobody sees the damage
that has already been made
someday i'm going to go to cut too far
then everyone i know will say good-bye to me
in a black line of cars
well that's what i came up with and i hope you at least liked it. and i'd like to thank you for letting me do something, for once i wasn't bored.
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classical beauty on March 22, 2005don't worry it had the makings of a great song, i loved it. well done xxx
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Pieces Of Darkness on February 13, 2005hahah jk *tackles u an licks u*
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Pieces Of Darkness on February 13, 2005hello my love
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DepressedGirl on January 30, 2005thanx... well if u ever need to talk to anyone then im here... u can im me if u want Vansxtcgirl69
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DepressedGirl on January 30, 2005hey thanx for all your comments! yeah i totally forgot i had this and was like WOA lmao... but yeah your poems kick ass
thanx again -
xAnonymousx on December 8, 2004Grr...growl...snarl...very hardcore
Edited on Dec 08, 3:28 p.m. because ''. -
BigPapaIsSoCool on November 13, 2004thanks for the comment and YES I LOVE MANSON!!! he is the best!
~jen -
luciagrace on November 6, 2004No problem, I guess I went off on one as well. We all have opinions, and thank god for them or it'd be hella boring.
-Lucia -
luciagrace on November 5, 2004I didn't read your whole comment before deleting it, but that's right, I'm not American, but nor do I sound off pretending that I know all the ins and outs of American politics, like you do. You're posting on a website that anyone can look at, so don't get so irate when people don't like your stuff.
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lyrical princess on October 31, 2004That's so cool i love Avril Lavigne and green day too
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Intp on October 11, 2004My critique wasn't intended to be rude; I intended only to be honest. I didn't judge your work on your age and I didn't insult you personally. I commented on your work. If you were coddled and indulged, your work would never improve. I don't critique people so that I feel better about myself for putting people down (because I don't), I critique honestly because candor is necessary when expressing your opinion.
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boundage bunny on October 10, 2004kik ass profile, kik ass music btw but i have to disagree on avril l. cuz she a poser in my eyes but good luck
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lithium on October 2, 2004dude look at my other shit, that poem was ment to be bad, im actually more talented
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DepressedGirl on September 13, 2004dude u f'in rock man!!! im me or email me... vansXTCgirl69 or punkrocksk8erchika@yahoo.com !!! we have a lot in common dude lol
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painted veil on September 11, 2004hey, if you have time, will you enter my contest because as of yet, it is STARVING for some good writers- cheers, ~kat
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KalieDovIsiON on August 26, 2004ZEPPELIN AND SABBATH RULE!!! i stumbled upon you when i was looking for someone else....just thought id say lol
~chris x -
Waste of Flesh on August 25, 2004My poem is sort of about cutting and being angry. In a way its alot of my feelings all into one.
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Crowfoot on August 22, 2004I've finally stumbled upon another townie hater. Don't you just hate them? It makes you want to pick up an axe and run into a crowd hacking and smashing. Well, keep rebelling against the townies is all I can say, because they are dominating our country. Soon there'll be enough of us to destroy them all - but until then we can dream. Cool stuff by the way.
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Third-Evasion on August 21, 2004you like really good music. youre probably a cool person.
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PurpleBunny on July 19, 2004Thank you for your kind words friend of Emilie, I feel privileged to be on your author page, it is indeed a great compliment.
Dan Abo
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candyecane2002 on July 3, 2004awe i feel so special you put me on there
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Dutch Doll on June 30, 2004Your autor page is great... do you like England? I have been there a few times and think it is pretty cool... i travel but i live in Amsterdam most of the time...
great poetry...
Audrianna
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alonewithoutyou on June 4, 2004got your message on my author page. you seem cool.... we should talk. i have to get off the computer right now. but i'll come back and im you soon
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minimatt on May 31, 2004umm... wow you kinda made an over generalization with the whole liking gays thing, every person is different gay people are just like everyone else, there and nice gay folks and there are jerks, anywho you seem like a nice kid, but don't become one of those fag hag girls, grow up a lil, life is almost never as bad as you think it is and as much as you think writing sad poetry makes you happy, I have been there and done that, and it only makes you focus on the bad.
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xPoisonxDollx on April 3, 2004Hey.. thnx 4 tha comment!!!!!!!!!
Mwwwahhh!(kiss)
~~~Amy
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