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Amphion on March 19, 2005I would greatly appreciate if you would critique my newest poems. They are lyrical in nature, but I am a poet first and a lyricist second, so I would like a poetic view on them before I try singing them. Thank you.
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philophant on March 9, 2004Hey, Ashi...it appears as though I'm leaving the site. I am going to go to school in France soon. I going to miss your poetry. Maybe you'll give me your email?
Oh, I have one last contest for 1111 pnts. Called "The Surrealist Contest." I hope to see you enter.
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MuseStalker on February 21, 2004I must go and thank macandrew for sharing you with me. I am adding you to my favorites list. You are quite an awesome poet.
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Cemetery Rose on February 12, 2004Thanks for the explination! (for "oh! sweet nurse")
I think I may love it even more!
It actually reminded me of a patient at this psychiatric hospital I work at, he was yelling all day for the nurse to give him his meds and felt like 'the world was going to end'
anyway...keep up the good work!
Susan
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Ashi on February 7, 2004nope, haven't read it yet. when it comes to books I'm more into writers like Orson Scott Card, Asimov, Clancy etc etc. You like Thomas Hardy?
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philophant on February 7, 2004Sorry I'm doing all the commenting on your author page, but while looking at the anthology list, I noticed that you have pretty much all the same books I do--minus all the Plath and the Stevie Smith woman. Tennyson, Wordsworth, Blake, Browning ("bake and burning"), Keats, Shakespeare, etc. Hmm. Thomas Hardy. Have you read his "Far from the Madding Crowd" novel? It's very Romanticky-era-ish.
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Ashi on February 7, 2004you would have had trouble spotting that since I added it today
I bought myself 9 new poetry bundles (Shakespeare, Keats, Tennyson, Blake, Browning, Wordsworth, Coleridge, Kipling and Fitzgerald) today so I decided to add that list.
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philophant on February 7, 2004Lookie here: a list of "anthologies" that you have...and among the Plaths and Poes there stands a "Stevie Smith."
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philophant on February 5, 2004O, dang, I missed the art/poetry contest of yours. Ah well...I was writing one on Rodin's The Gates of Hell, but it takes me at least two weeks to revise, etc. sighs
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Ashi on February 5, 2004I think so, let me quickly go check in my original bought copy of edgar allan poe's the raven
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philophant on February 5, 2004A Dream within a Dream...mmm. Have you read To One In Paradise?
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Saratis on January 28, 2004write another poem Ashi... 99 is a cumbersome number .... now to read the fifty or so I missed....
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Menohir on January 27, 2004Hey Ashi DarkRain did NOT check the critique button.
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FireoftheNight on January 27, 2004Thanks for your punctuation tips and kind words. Its greatly appreciated.
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Menohir on January 26, 2004I told you "don't talk to strangers" is great.
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Menohir on January 21, 2004HAHAHAH..jeeeezz......I feel for you...you should watch you say Ashi, EVIL. Hey burrie, I won't be surprised if you can't sleep tonight. Don't feel bad about it, you didn't see it, I've never come across someone who didn't ask for a critique. You just try to help people out in this sight by improving their poetry skills, why would you go and try to bring people down. You are a good person, I know you only had the best intensions. But it's sad that people have these strives eventhough they all mean well. I see you've found my favourite lyrics, yes Agalloch I've always loved, I think I'll go put a song on my author page. See ya.
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BrokenSouledPoetess on January 7, 2004Just so you know...I did NOT check the critique button on my poems...I write what I write and it is all from the heart. If you do not like my writing, then that is fine...but please do not rip apart my poetry...it is mine...I do not force things...I just write what is in my head and heart to write. I would appreciate it if from now on, if you feel that you must comment on my poetry, if you would just not leave a comment if you have nothing nice to say. I can appreciate constructive criticism when I ask for it...but I do not ask for it too often. My poems are me and when they are ripped to shreds by someone who knows nothing of me...it hurts.
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deldev on January 4, 2004Ahoy there young Ashi!
I just wanted to say welcome back and that I hope you had a pleasant holiday. You've been gone weeks, what have you been up to - anything fun? I've also been off work for the last fortnight, but have just been lazing around - something I'm very good at!
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philophant on November 18, 2003thnkx for your comment on Madame Teacher. by the way, why is your screenname 'Ashi'? i thought for a minute you were one of my cousins (i have some cousins with the last name Achi).
ah, cool, you like dark stuff. so do i. i've written a few murder stories and such, and i love agatha christie. you like E. A. Poe! that's soo awesome! i love him and his stories. i just posted a poem 'One Stray'd from Paradise' in a readbe inspiredwrite contest, in response to his 'To One in Paradise'.
i looked at your poems. interesting. Satan Dressed in White...hahaha...what a priest...so you're Christian? are you Catholic or Protestant? i geuss you're Protestant, as few Catholics would write such a poem!
'I wore my silver cross and dressed in robes of white
for the creature, I believed, could not strike
a man so evidently part of God...
Or so I thought.'
that is very accurate. once, when one of my little brothers was being baptized, another brother of mine took a picture of the priest's belly (i'm sure you know what kind of a paunch priests have.)
i attend a protestant church, but my dad was formerly Catholic, and so my little brother was baptized in the Catholic church when we went to see his family in Lebanon.
i'm new to this site. i like it, but one can never tell...there's a kindof alot of crap...i've mainly stayed on Oldpoetry.
well, until we meet again Ashi. aurevoir!
-phil -
RollingStone on November 6, 2003trying to gain on you in the stretch, but I just can't catch you. you keep having these little bursts of speed!
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Hobbit Warrior on November 5, 2003You said that should I want to hear another poem like the one you put on my author page, I should just say so. Well, I love that poem, it was great, can you recommend anything else?(or anyone)
Besides that I just wanted to say that I've read some of your poems and I really like them. *two thumbs up* and now I'm off to read more......
lol,
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Decrescendo on October 13, 2003Hey... noticed you were from SA. That's awesome. I am too actually only I'm living in Canada. (and yes i do speak Afrikaans, i just prefer not to attempt writing because I can't spell and that makes me feel stupid..haha
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anyway, off to read some of your poems.
Cheers
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Napkin on October 11, 2003Thnx and yes they r the best kinda like Evanescenes and the sex pistols
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Napkin on October 11, 2003U rock and love ur music i like a lot of undergroiund
metal and goth stuff too u ever heard of Firend Dream? Also ur poems r awesome and although i m not really interested in anime like ur picks. Thanx fer the reveiws i love it when people read like almost all my poems oh yeah u r going on my Faves list cause u Rock
Join me in the Shadows
Twisted like me
In my land of porcelian dolls
My dark prince awaits
Srry go a lil carried away there ne way great writes -
Pyro Elf on October 9, 2003Thank you so much for the criticking!!
wow, i will work on changing those some, cuz you have a great point!! tahnk you so much 
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Blondita on October 7, 2003Dankie weereens vir die kommentaar lol..sal terug kom om jou
werk te lees later vanaand...dis goed dat mense hier praat
afrikaans...gee my die kans om to beoefen vir een dag as
ek terug kom on te kuier
Mooi bly
~ sonia ~
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I'm on one of your favourite authors? i feel special! yes, my poems are depressing, but im working on that, you notice the small filtering of happy pagan poems in there? i know its not your idea of "happy," but its what makes me happy! dark poetry is my specialty, and what im good at. youre good at being happy and making people feel good. *smiles*
blessed be
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myron on September 18, 2003thanks for your encouraging comments.
yes, traditionally the western haiku was 5.7.5 but these days it's more like 17 syllables or under - some think the fewer the words the better the haiku. the important thing with them is to create pictures (using the 5 senses) rather than writing statements in lines.
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Saratis on September 17, 2003I would like to say that I find your poems very well written. I am glad I got a chance to read them. I'll read more at a later date!
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punk on September 9, 2003Woo, I hate to do this to ya man, but I'm gonna go through and comment on every one of your poems..I've been reading them and they are excellent, and I feel that they deserve the attention. Rock on.
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Amphion on September 9, 2003i appreciate you offer to help me in my work, but i would rather let my own mind censor my poetic side. your offer is kind, yet not accepted. now i gotta check out your stuff.
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polyphemus on September 4, 2003you should read 'transfiguration'
by annie dillard.
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i liked it.
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Rico DaSilva on September 4, 2003How's it going Ashi? I'm glad you liked my poem. I did choose the name Loui for a reason. Since my question was pretty much if people have a choice in their evil actions I thought it was appropriate to call him Loui. Short for Lucifer. I hope you enter my contest still. I started it by thanking you. C ya Rico
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Rico DaSilva on September 2, 2003Hey Ash, I got my contest running. Hope you enjoy it! It's called "Mock Society". Thanks again. Cyaround Rico
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Rico DaSilva on September 2, 2003That was very cool of you to donate me points. Thank you so much and I defenitely let you know about my contest as soon as I post it. It may even be later on today. Thanks again and I will keep on swinging by your site. Rico
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Ashi on August 30, 2003YAY, i finally had enough points to post my own competition, sheesh i had to write lotsa reviews for those points. hope you all join. unluckily I will have too be inpartial, and my sister Leviel will help me judge to make sure i stay that way. hehe.
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polyphemus on August 29, 2003haha, i also like anime.
i just went to the local anime convention last weekend...
yeah...
anime freaks pop out where you least expect them.
i personally like 'my nieghbor totoro' the best...
but anyway.
the best critic?
me?
no way, there are tons of awesome critiquers here,
you just haven't found them yet.
heh, but thanks for the flattery.
makes me feel special.
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how can i follow all these great comments? but since you commented on my information, i shall now return the favour.
so, youve actually counted the hours and how many animes you have seen? nah, i could never do that. im just not commited. i enjoy your poems alot and am very suprised you like mine... ::checks my book:: nope, youre the first one that like them besides others on this site. wow, didnt know so many nice people were in the world. damn, ive been proved wrong again. humanity is... good!?!
you know what i just realized? InuYasha is back on adult swim. YAAAAY!!!!! bah, im a freak. if you get cartoon network, tune in tonight at midnight. less about me, more about you. uhhhh... the best thing i can say is that youre nice. youre actually nice to me. in real life, you may hate me, but on here, youre a nice person. hardly anyone is nice to me anymore. thank you.
done with my rant. have a nice life, and please dont be depressed again. its hell.
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Wolfpoet on August 25, 2003Pops in for a cup of tea and takes a look around. Epics you say? You are much too kind, your own work is as inspiring as it is heartfelt.
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polyphemus on August 21, 2003Oh yeah... I figured it was about time that I welcomed you to AP.. so.. welcome.
If you have any questions, you could always just ask me.
I'm sure you'll enjoy your time here. o)
Keep entering challenges,
if you've already won mine,
you have a very good chance of winning others.
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SnowAngel1317 on August 19, 2003Hey.
Welcome to Ap!
I've read enough of your work to be absolutely certain that you're a gifted writer. I love the collab you wrote for the contest. That truly is a beautiful and stunning piece. Then reading "a dead child's words", I was shocked to find myself surprised that your talent is not just retained in one genre, but in many. They were both very well written piece. Keep writing, and Thanks for sharing.
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forever changed on August 17, 2003Hiya!My friend recommended your poems(mornietinwe)so i decided to come and check them out,i have read some-there really good!Keep up the good work and i look forward to seeing more of your work
luv sarah x
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