"Lies,"
Lisa says
"it's just all lies",
I contemplate the fly
that landed in my coffee
and plan its demise
watching the heartshaped
hole
in her panties
wink at me
as she walks away.
The poems I've lost
march past in succession
the molecules that collated me
snickering
in the background.
"The needle's stuck
on the surface of my soul,"
I spit back,
snagging the fly
with a sigh.
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Written January 15th, 2005
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This one always makes me feel kinda funny now and not so good when I read it but I can't help but love it .. masochist fly in me or something ... or the fact that you made it so damn funny .. sigh.
hey. tgif.
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All the images in here could mean so many different things.
I contemplate the fly
that landed in my coffee
(implying that the lie that Lisa is referring to is the fly in something that is supposed to keep you happy and stimulated all day ... )
Not quite sure what the winking heartshaped hole in her panties s suggests. Love? Sex? Perhaps deceit? Interesting, very different image though.
"The needle's stuck
on the surface of my soul,"
Repeating yourself over and over. You're like a scratched record? I'm just guessing, but it makes sense if it's a record needle and skipping over your soul.
snagging the fly
with a sigh.
You've gotten rid of the little problem for now...but the sigh suggests that you perhaps know it will happen again.
Very interesting, probably the best thing I've read all day. The title was original too! Very cool.
Phoebe -
No, i didn't think it was a record player skipping...i was talking about a metaphor..."the needle's stuck"...like when it is on a record player...it skips and repeats...i was relating that to a "record needle" stuck on the soul...and the similarities that would produce. Thought i should clarify...make sure my comment made sense.
UB
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I like dead flies and spilt coffee.
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"and pink...that the color of love or the color between the legs?"
god, if this pink here was the colour of the between there i would insist people wore sunglasses. it looks the same colour as strawberry slushpuppies, the raspberry ones always blue. so weird. hmm hmm.
everyone talking about lying at the moment. i quite like lying it is much cheaper than having to actually buy blusher from mr maybeline.
once i had knickers with a star shape cut out, but it looked like a pop art style explosion, like in a comic book - so i was terribly worried someone might think the hole was the result of a fanny fart.
"pow"
shut up shut up claire.
hey nice poem.
Edited on Jan 15, 6:15 p.m. because ''. -
well, there you have it.
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Big pome in small space: we have the Lie, the Muse, sex, separation, nostalgia, feet o'clay and a general impotence, which sums up what poetry is about, and women too, yet we all long for the fly to bite us a bit. And don't tell everyone, they'll all want one. Last line was a comic implosion, at least in the eyes of this grimy worm, if worms have eyes. Which they probably don't. Hmmm.
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GOT 'im huh? hehehe.
Just scoop him up and finish your coffee.
"The needles stuck on the surface of my soul" Reads odd to me. The needles are stuck or the needle's stuck. Ahh who knows.
Anyways, don't forget to wink back.
Desiree -
hmmmm...so, is lisa accusing you of the lies or is she defending her own? But by your wrath at the fly in the coffee...planning its demise (but then again, i would feel that way if a fly landed in my first cup of morning java...would definitely piss me off )
and she's got a heart shaped hole in the back of her panties huh? hmmmm...now what would that be useful for huh? naughty lute! hahaha. (and you say i have a dirty mind! hmmmpppff! haha...)
Love the whole "needles stuck on the surface of my soul" bit...skip, repeat, skip, repeat, skip...oh yeah...know all about that...ohhhhhhh...but wait a minute...it is not "needle's"...it is "needles"...hmmmm...guess i will have to think more deeply on this...or not...you know, i need some coffee...
hey, since you're all preferred till august and all...don't you think you should use some pics or something??? jeepers...stop being so wasteful! haha
and pink...that the color of love or the color between the legs?
did i say that? hahahahhahaha...
UB
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