The whispers cry in the break of dawn
Yet the sole listener cannot hear them
She cannot breach the drowning waters
That was born from the shadows of her tears
Her heart was broken, herself forgotten
Behind society's judging stares
She ran away, inside herself
To escape the soul of all her fears
She cannot make the water's see
What hurts her deep inside
For what if the water's wash away
Showing her what she cries behind
So she tries to breathe again
The freezing air cutting deep
She dives under, sparing nothing
To search for things she cannot find
The water's bring her under
Despite her solemn cries
Blending in the massive seas
Washing away her fear
The maiden still is seen today
With her raven coloured hair
But whatever you do, don't touch her
For she'll never again appear
Author notes
Well, you just have to see the picture. I love that picture and it just sparked a inspiration for a poem. And... Ta Daa!! Hope you like it.
Forest Elf
Written January 15th, 2005
A contest entry
- What do you see?? by UnderTheFloorboards.
300 points, ended January 18, 2005, 21 entries
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i have not seen this picture, but there is so much imagery in this that i formed my own so easily. this poem has a delicate feel and gave me the constant feeling of being afraid. well done i really enjoyed this piece. god bless ~taz~
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I really like this poem, I think there are only two or three kind of sad poems in here and right now i am in the mood to read them.
great job
~Joy
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Awesome poem, i couldnt have done it better myself. Well, i couldnt have done it at all really. Though i love how you describe every little detail and emotion. You have a talent for poetry, you should never give up. Thank you for the support also, it is very much appreciated.
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Thanks, I don't know why but i have troubles with no rhythmning poems.
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Thanks.
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i havent looked at the picture yet but i can say i love the poem. it flows beautifully. i have a problem with that so i greatly admire your talent. wonderful write
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very nice....i especially like your first few lines....the part about the whispers gave me shivers...the part about diving to search about things she cant find is also very good...great job, i enjoyed this
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