He doesn’t dare to touch her
as she kneels in misery
But even from a distance
he feels her agony
He watches as she mourns
and longs to turn to stone
She curses ~ prays to God
but still; she’s flesh and bone
He howls in bitter rage
that she should suffer so
as she guards her barren womb
where life refused to grow
He reaches out for her
as the tears turn her soul blue
And he grieves because the passion
of red should be her hue
He wonders if she blames him
because his seed is weak
and months turned into years
without the child they seek
He really needn’t worry
She blames God, alone
And she adds that to the list of sins
for which she must atone
He softly strokes her shoulder
calling; to her heart within
she’s awed when his love reaches out
and she starts to breathe again
Patricia Gibson-Williams
January 2, 2005
Author notes
I think this poem tells you why blue is my color. I don't know if I'll ever get the passion or the hope back... Day after day blue consumes me more and more. I hope this is what you were looking for. Patti
Written January 15th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- What Color Describes You The Best? by HumbledOne.
300 points, ended January 30, 2005, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Wow, I love this for its originality and character. You get what you want to say across very vividly. My color would be blue too....
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The despair played from the beginning until the very end. I could empathize with this person-understanding her sorrow, her anger and then the guilt for saying the things she probably said. This was excellent on top of excellent!!!
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G reat
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cool.. i remember reading a poem maybe it was also yours.. always based on an image that appears on top of it.. nice portray.. and as always.. keep up the good work..
i like your style.. very cool..
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Wow, I mean, wow.
No other words
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Xcellent
painfully introspective and beautiful write... excellent -
this is absoultely beautiful..it written very well..the rhymes are awesome and it flows just wonderfully. it is sweet yet at the same time so sad. thank you for sharing this with us it is great
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I know I already read and commented but I couldn't help myself...so I read it again. It's still got the same impact and emotion. I love it! This time I'm bookmarking!
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Very sweet poem, it tells a sad story but tell it in an enchanting way , really a lovely write lovely flow, and very expressive, a lot of feeling came through and made the reader feel for the woman, keep penning you have talent lovely use of words i will be around when you post a new one I hope as lovely as this one but I am sure it will be, all the best a really super write
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wow this was an absolutly amazing write, i was rendered speechless (i think thats how you spelled rendered) during the whole write, the rhymes were definatly very good and the flow was impeckable, maybe soon in the future i will have to chance to read more of your work in hopes that they are somewhere even close to this piece, if so you will see more good replies coming from me, well once again good write, and good luck on future writes that you decide to make, have a nice night..cya later
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Wow. I'm speechless. This grabbed my attention right from the beginning. It was so sad, but yet..there's not even a word to describe how amazing this was. Keep writing. And cheer up.
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Oh this is a wonderfully written poem. The rhythm is perfect and the meaning of the poem is very good. It's filled with richness and very good examples of alliteration throughout the poem. Very nice job!
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Aww...I'm not even sure of what to say. I love it. ^-^ I hope you feel better though. And I hope you win the contest. You should- this has a lot of profound meaning.
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This poem is strong with feeling and emotion. I can't get enough of it! It's beautiful for what it is and I hope you find what you are looking for, you sound like an amazing person. No one likes to suffer but I see it as a blessing. Without suffering we would forget to be thankful for happiness. *shrugs* That's how I see it anyways. If you wouldn't mind reading Remember by me. It's supposed to be inspirational and uplifting and I would like to get your opinion on it. I never ask on here...akward...
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OMG..that was...sad! But...it was really really....GOOD!!! Okay well i liked the format! I liked the flow! Nice write! Keep up the good work! My favorite lines were...
He softly strokes her shoulder
calling; to her heart within
she’s awed when his love reaches out
and she starts to breathe again
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Wow beautiful i like the interaction between the two...or lack of...its beautiful! I love it! keep writing
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wonderful
Patti, I'm speechless! This is a poem that truly touched my heart and soul! Your words are absolutely beautiful! I am so glad you entered this contest because this is such a wonderful piece it deserves to be recognized! I'm sorry that your shade is always blue! I hope brighter days are in your future! God bless and good luck in the contest!-Erin -
Outstanding!!! This poem reaches in and really grabs your soul.
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I'm really sorry about the sorrow you have within your soul, you do pen beautifully even in your state of mind, I appreciate you sharing you, and I hope for better days for your wonderful soul, much love I send!!!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver
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wonderbread
oh my....thay was incredible. thank ou for gracing me with such exquisite work. keep your chin up and remember, a color can never consume you completely.
-Lunatic -
well said and truly sad..
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