The car is running
This night is numbing
My brain is strumming
But that is love
The drifts are building
This city's sleeping
I must be dreaming
But that is love
When drinking gets old
And it does this, I'm told
(Make even the losers bold)
That's love
It's too cold to pump gas
Or even light a smoke
How many more times
Should I pass --
Your house
And second look...
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Written January 14th, 2005
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great I love it...
Amritha
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Good, because I can't even bring myself to click on your poetry, so it sounds like we mutually don't care for eachother's work. Except I'm a published book writer, and a famous musician, and you're just another blip on the cow radar of mid west american dulleries.
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Yawn Excuse me this bored me to tears sorry I couldn't get pass the first but is this love. Sorrry you need to liven this up a tad. To me it is boring as all get out.
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i like the way you did this one,you put your words together great,saying so much here does sound like love keep up the great work
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This is so special....I do agree with you..it definitely is love if you feel that way.
love can make a person become courageous...it is so true...keep up the good work...
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i think this is a good poem thought it is not my favourite kind it goes , good job fi kezXxX
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yeah, lyrics. You say quite a bit in just a few words; there’s a story here. The best bit is “Should I pass -- your house and second look...” Something about “second look”...like second guess. Clever, clever.
I enjoyed. Thanks for entering.
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As much as I hate stalking and as freaky as it can be (i'd know unfortunately), I found this to be a great write. I like how it build up from what seemed to be an everyday thing into a 'Stalkers special"
This makes stalking sound inviting. I think I might take up stalking as a hobby.
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Hey you better drive home you have to work in less then an hour quit driving around her house the neigboor hood watch will surely call the cops. Sounds like a stalkers story to me LOL! Good piece!
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a spruce of parsnip? hehehe. Yes, i guess it is find another source of amusement or be banned.
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Just another sloppy Joe from Uranus
You know what I've discovered about Uranus Ed?
It instantly makes everything personal.
Now I'm goig to give you some advice:
Leave the idiots alone
they rule the world, and
will only make you eat
your own limbs in collective
madness, with a spruce of parsnip
and cold tea.
Edited on Jan 14, 9:11 p.m. because ''. -
a tantalizing torta smeared with beans and cream
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A furry vanilla grotto of benevolence and flung fluff.
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that poem was a great write
When drinking gets old
And it does this, I'm told
Make even the losers bold
But that is love
thats my favorite line i loved the way you put two stories in one but now i am sad
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Good Piece
I am a little confused about the title of this one. I do not see how it fits in. Other than that, I found this to be a very nice poem and full of true feelings and expression. You have a great talent and I look forward to reading more of your works. Keep up the good work! -
great work this poem is about broken love and a man or woman that cant seem to find iit and is depressed i really liked this piece everyone has had broken love but never go to far like "How many more times
Should I pass --
Your house
And second look..."
unless i got the wrong idea like that could also mean he or she is just missing that oersin and wants them back im not to sure but that is a great love poem and i like the form you used to write it. I also like how you ended it with "But that is love" its a cool poem and i can tell that this was a well thought out piece im glad you posted it and im happy i got to read it thats all i have to say so goodbye
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