As we lie here
this night,
like so many
other nights…
Sometimes we make love…
Sometimes not, per se…
But always love shelters us,
and love is always spoken,
to each other…
As one or the other of us
drifts off to sleep,
our thoughts are
of each other,
often enough…
For this is our favorite time
of the day…
The time of day
that says,
“I love you”,
most effectively…
For that is the time
in which
we snuggle
together…
We feel each other’s hearts beat,
and our slow, deliberate breathing,
which signals sleep approaching…
With a final, “I love you”
spoken sleepily…
We drift off to sleep
in each other’s arms…
© Jonathan Wikkins January 14, 2005
Revised February 11, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written January 14th, 2005
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This write is amazing I would see it as gold worthy if you want my O.P I hope to see a shinny gold on here soon it is well worth t of it love it from beginning to the end, I even like your stanza1 wonderful!
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wonderfully written. Lots of love in this great write. I appreciate your entering it into my contest.
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Simply amazing.
I can't say anything bad about this poem.
It's just wonderful.
good luck.
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This is a very touching write. Very enjoyable to read. I like how you describe that time of day and the touching of two hearts.
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This evokes lovein gentler times without all thw worries we sometimes feel that cause us to lose sight of that gentleness. Very lovely.
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Ohh I love the feelings described in this poem, or at least the ones close enough to what you are describing that I feel I can relate. My favorite lines:
The time of day
That says, “I love you”
Most effectively…
Nice background, great write- wouldn't change anything about it
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This is really sweet!!! damn!.. I wish someone would say those words to me ;P lol...very good write!
God Bless!
Lyn
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Oh, this is beautiful... really shows the connection that two people can have and how loving that can be... those special cuddling moments, that safe feeling while falling to sleep.
Lovely write, enjoyed this.
~ Wendy
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This was a good write on a very special time of day. Sleepy-time! My favorite part of the day! Two things, lots of commas but no periods and was the (....) thing at the end of each stanza for dramatic effect? Overall, I think you did an excellent job on a great subject. Btw, thanks for the applause on my new poem.
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The thing I miss most not having someone in my life, is the entwining each other as we drift to sleep. That connection, creates one of the perfect moments of life. The addition of a sleepy..."i love you"...adds a smile to dreams to come.
Very sweet piece...I very much enjoyed.
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this is truelly beautifuly. i am so happy for you. I am gald that you are so happy. also this is a excelent poem as always
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