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When man pampers voilence,
its a crime,
In self-righteousess,
when creator itself
is the invader,
Who's to give
the assessment?

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I wrote this after the tsunami disaster.
Written January 14th, 2005

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  • madhavmool
    May 13, 2005
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    excitement

    No title by Apurva's meaningful poem felt us blank in our mind by the title of poem as well as in the context which can't be responsible to anybody.


  • eternalpoet
    March 23, 2005
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    4 stars ****

    You have right to destroy what is yours.. you have right to thrash and wipe out what you have....God is the creator.. he has the right to destroy.. we cant give him the tag of doing crime.. dont girls today have abortion.. ???? .. well.. your point is nice.. i never thought like that.. hey sis.. sorry if i made you feel bad.. i was just giving out my point of view.. i am extremely sorry.. anyways.. this is a nice write.. take cares and have a nice time.. just keep it up dear ... your humble little friend.. .. ... ... - vic ( who else?)

  • Bojju
    March 4, 2005
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    well i can not doubt the poetic avility u have ,,but i think i have to say few things differently
    Raja may be ur right that creator dont have anything to do with violence but what he does is that while creating human beings he in corporates violative nature into them ...any time any where u see it the greed and over agreesiveness rattle our thoughts
    and creator must be questioned and he is to blame for that
    Bojju

  • a u r a
    January 21, 2005
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    A purva , I agree with Joel,and I also believe the creator has his reasons , which we in our limitations fail to understand -yes, the tsunami has left me too very upset ,on a personal level I have lost a very dear pal of mine to it -and I grieve for the hapless unsung defeated with all my heart -but in my own limited sphere I also somewhere phatom there has to be a reason why so much was sacrificed , though at the present moment , for the life of me I dont want to really comprehend-I am still hurting -Your poem is very well written and the sorrow you feel for this calamity is very well portrayed
    Edited on Jan 21, 6:34 because ''.


  • Poet Raja
    January 14, 2005
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    Wonderful!!!

    My dear girl, I understand your pain but the Creator does not invade nor incite violence. We aggravate the nature by violating it to satisfy our needs and when nature is violated we have to pay the price.

    We have been playing with the earth too much, digging as we please, destroying trees and mountains, even deserts and rivers. Naturally nature is disrupted and it crumbles right down on us.

    But of course we do lament the loss of our people and property.

    The poem is short and to the point and you are a wonder at that.

    Love from Coimbatore - Joel -

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