Desolate tundra
Signs of life swept clear away
Traces of her, gone.
Sunlight creeps in slowly, waking her once more
The Lady Slipper lives again...
Author notes
This is my first try at a nature poem -- hope it's okay 
The beginning 3 lines of this are a haiku, followed by the last two closing lines. The Lady Slipper is Minnesota's state flower, and the poem sort of centers around the coldness here. lol, it's -7 right now, and not even noon yet
Written January 13th, 2005
A contest entry
- 10 Lines by Somnium.
300 points, ended March 2, 2005, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I really like haikus; the short simple way in which ideas are delivered. The impact a few small words can make. Awesome.
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Sunlight creeps in slowly, waking her once more
The Lady Slipper lives again...
beautiful!
short and sweet-nice!!!
keep it up!!!!
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Awesome
This is so beautiful and so amazing and in such a 'small' poem! I absolutely love it~ -
Very beautifully written. The imagery is brillantly described, and well thought. Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest.
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Desolate tundra.Girl, I so identify.I'm from northern Wi.so I feel that line.This is a very pretty poem, and leaves one hopeful, and waiting for spring.Very mature work for one so young.Keep writing!Best of luck in the contest,Rob
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Hahaha, you're so very odd
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Chicken, fingers, newt's eye stew, Here's a valentine as I heart yew.
Or Roses might be red, and violets might be blue
but when I smell something weird.. then I know that It's YEW!!!
Muahahahahaha. Oh yeah.. Nice Haiku. -
this is an exquisite piece. short, but still captures so much. i love the contrast of a barren cold world then the mentioning of sunlight and rebirth of the flower. i love how you personify the flower as 'her' it gives so much life to this piece. beautiful job. simply gorgeous. keep it up! (for your first nature piece this is amazing) and best of luck in the contest <33
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Wow...this is very good. I have never written nature poetry, and I think that this is a very good example of one. The flower awaking after a season of death and cold. I loved it. I hope that you do well in the contest. Again thank you for commenting on my poem.
Despair
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this is very good, you've started the poem with somber images and changed it to a happy and sunny picture. I guess that so is life, after the darkness only light can come to us.
short and pleasant
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you sure this is your first time writing a nature poem?lol I loved it.It was short but I loved it all.Very descriptive,but thats the purpose to nature poems right ? lol well anyway I really enjoyed reading this.Very unique.
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now this is a very simple little poem, but it does talk of the return of a lovely bloom to ground that one would think was eternally frozen. I am going to have to look for this.
Pops -
very feminine
this was amazing...simply amazing. i like it a lot. you have talent.
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