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Salty tears

Salty tears
I bite down on my quivering lip
these hopes and fears
how can I deal with all this?
Oh, God, I  ask Him, again and again
but I'm sure i deserve this with all my sin
You promised not to send something I can't handle
but, forgive me, I have doubts, in fact my mind is full
can't see straight, can't make myself eat
I can't stand up on my own, I won't let myself sleep
Oh God, I ask you one more time
take it away please, and let me die
You joy no longer in me,
a terrible servent for you I am
I know that I can't hurt myself
we know full-well you can
Oh God, this time i plead with you,
releive this pain I've put myself through

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Written January 12th, 2005

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  • kntryg
    January 13, 2005
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    Very Good

    Definetely great writing.. It is amazing all of the emotions you can feel from this poem...Kntryg

  • romeomustdie
    January 13, 2005
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    deep feeling and lots of emotions, but yet a great write

  • Moontanman
    January 13, 2005
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    great

    Since i am a victum of chronic pain I can understadn some fo what the author was saying but in this case I think it was enotional pain and physical pain.