Their empty eyes of sorrow
staring at me for an answer
to all their loneliness
when all i have is
a sad glance and a silent wish
Their hollow cries for help
piercing my heart
leaving a cold and hard look
running away from all the pleas
Their eternal flow of tears
stained into their eyes
never seeing the stains in my eyes
only the shallow gloss on my heart
Reaching out for a loving word
only to be left with a taste of hate
crying with nothing but the questions
When we're all the ones that need the answers
©Rebecca Pankratz
Author notes
ok well this is what i wrote sooo get over it
Written January 12th, 2005
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Amazingly superly awesome!
Oh man this was fucking awesome! The title drew me into this poem. It flowed so beautifully and really shows that emotion. I love the lines "when all i have is
a sad glance and a silent wish" and also "never seeing the stains in my eyes
only the shallow gloss on my heart"
And your last line is so true! Amazing!
Jessie
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I want to say wow. But I already said it. lol. holy.......this was really good. I think Iwasn't breathing throughout the poem......not sure though. I never really know when I'm breathing or not...maybe that's why I already of a sudden take a deep breath for no reason..hm....... Good write.
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Written very nicely , very expressive! ^_^
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good poem
Very well written from your heart. I want to let you know you are not alone and God loves you and so do I! You have value my dear and I learned that also.
I like you did not value myself. I do now as I know God loves me as He loves you and your are special as He makes no mistakes.
Live life to its fullness and take a stand for you as you are worth it.
I am the host of the Angels Group and I invite you to bacome an Angel and join our Angels Team. The link is on my author's page.
God is blessing you!
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Excellent work and the imagery is great. Keep writing.
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that is so true
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lovely
wow, its absolutely lovely. so expressive and wonderful. dont ever stop writing, spare the world devistation.
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great write way better than mine
~mystic
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Excelent written, don't ever put your pen down!
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damn, I mean the imagery in this is completely awesome.
I would pick some favorite lines but I think it'd take up too much space. great write!
best of luck! -
I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS I LOVE THIS...you say you cant write??? you can...very well!!!!
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ha ha ha ha ur scared of bubble wrap......hmmmm maybe that's what i should get u for ur b-day!!!! lol yea sounds like a plan lol hmmm maybe not...tee hee or maybe idk a nice big sheet of nice round bubbles for you to pop!!!! lol noooo i love ya to much and plus ur a good friend and all and yea maybe i need to find someone else to torture now?
naaaaaaaaaaahhhh!!!!
luv
bec
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it really was
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sure i bet it was tee hee ok well yea
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sweet niceness
i luv it great write sis
I WUV A LUB U
SKITZ
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