Nothing to say that hasn't been said.
Not a thought original, in my head.
Quotes from the realist,
fill my limited range.
On the wings of other's imagination,
I build myself, weak and strange.
Not a song to sing, that hasn't been sung.
Nowhere a bell to ring, that has not been rung.
Those who keep the world moving,
with a dream in their eye.
These gems in the rough,
who look with wonder upon the sky.
How I long to start a revolution,
and change the face of things.
How I long to be quoted,
have the piece of mind it brings.
Nothing to say that hasn't been said,
not an original thought in my head.
Oh how that makes me feel,
to know it isn't true.
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Written January 12th, 2005
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Go forth and start a revolution
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Those who keep the world moving,
with a dream in their eye.
These gems in the rough,
who look with wonder upon the sky.
well done , well done -
for someone without an original thought, I found this very creative and well constructed. An enjoyable read.
Rory -
Deep
This was a very deep and awesome piece.Thanks for sharing your feelings with us.
It was a good read.
Kari -
A very good piece. I enjoyed this read alot..
Soulful Woman -
great.
This is a great poem, and I really understand what this feels like. We all strive to be quoted, a motivation often greater than most in this world. -
interesting. different. good job with writing this. enjoyed the read.
blu -
super
Hi...such a deep topic expressed so simplistically profound...it left a thoughtful afterimage in my mind when I finished reading. Great work, keep writing! -
It has a good idea but can't relate to that cos I always want to be unique....keep penning!!!
hugs & kisses,
anethsky -
i like the ideas of this one.. everything said in this piece is very interesting.. i like the imagery of this one.. great job.. keep it up..
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fine job
this is a very different read, this is a decent write from what I got from it,it took me all the way through and held my attention. good write, thanx for sharing this with all of us here. waiting to read more of your writes in the near future. -
Very nice
Deeply thought provoking poem a great read penned with a great deal of contemplation behind it. Please critic a poem. -
Great!
Excellent work! I can really relate to that at times and I know what it's like to feel like just another face in the crowd, especially compared to amazing authors such as J.K. Rowling and Charles Dickens (very different, I know...but I love almost all literature). Fantastic work, keep it up! -
can relate to the underline emotion(s). of course with the rhyming, it took away from its overall power. but still. as is. good job. enjoyed.
Blu -
Very nice, well written and full of emotional visuals, it was a pleasure to read, nice smooth flow, an evchanting piece from a clever poet, ,well done, I shall be back to read more of your work, wish the day had 48 hours there is some great work coming out of this site, and not enough time to read them all. well done, keep penning my friend, I will be back
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thats a great poem i really like it. it seems like alot of people are writing about writing now lol. but i really like it, it is original in its own way. i liked your use of words, i to feel that way sometimes. great job! keep it up!
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That's so true...I feel that all the time, especially in the art world. Then I start to get horribly depressed...;__; I sure hope it's not true though. Lovely write ^^
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an invocation to an inner child
lovely poem and those are some couplets you have there! it speaks to my inner child since my inner child first thought that poetry would be something with such beautiful rhymes. Thank you for the invocation. -
Being unoriginal is only not being you, you have to put yourself in everything you do, wholeheartedly believe that you are unique, and listen to your insticts, they'll be your guiding light... that was a very inspiring poem,
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very good use of words
I just like it, maybe it's the ring that it has or certain parts of it that remind me of a survival movie. anyhow, it is a great work of art, very nice play with words. -
How I long to start a revolution,
and change the face of things.
How I long to be quoted,
have the piece of mind it brings.
Oh, this is amazing. This says everything I've hoped for to write in a poem. Your language makes it even better, because it's straight to the point. I love the voice behind this. I think every child has dreamt of being a hero, but not everybody grows up with enough idealism (oftentimes, masked by cynicism; most often cynic people are the most idealist.haha) to desire to trigger a revolution that just might cause a change in the system. This is truly amazing.
Keep writing
Kannika -
Very well constructed. I was able to read through without having to stop and figure out the meter. Flowed like warm maple syrup down a tall stack of corncakes.
That, and your subject matter was right on target! I write commercials for a living, and believe me...if you want to feel un-original...
Anyway, enjoyed it very much, please keep writing!
Jim -
sometimes i see what people around me have accomplished or what crafty ideas they come up with and i feel left out. maybe i was out sick the day "original" was handed out
until i look at what i write, or make someone a greeting card or even tell a joke like no one else can. we are all originals, some aggressive, some passive, some haven't found their way yet.
these are the thoughts your poem provoked in me
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'Oh how that makes me feel,
to know it isn't true.'
Im sure that we all feel that way sometimes, where we just feel so fake. I know I do!! Very good write that i can relate to!!! Thank you for sharing!!! -
I know what you mean
Feeling so unoriginal at times, only to be reminded by yourself, that it isn't true. It's a wonderful feeling really. You feel really proud, right?
Realizing that you're not original as such, yet you are. I don't think a lot of people realize that. We are like evrybody else, yet still individual at all times. Congratulations, you have realized who and what you are! Human. A pack animal, in need of others to reflect yourself in, yet like the wolf, with your own status and figure in the packs you associate with...
Interesting, is it not?
Very nice, revelation.
Love, MJ
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