Chorus
Why should I lie awake anymore
Thinkin' about what's behind the door
Waiting for dreams that may never be
Trying to escape mediocrity
Verse 1
Dreams like a passion and success I seek
A portion of the treasures of the world to keep
I'd rather be famous than to be unknown
I know how it feels to be alone
Repeat Chorus
Verse 2
No plans to honor, but the dreams I build
I won't stop trying till my heart is stilled
Some may forsake me, but I won't die, yet
Some think I'm crazy, but they won't forget
Repeat Chorus
Verse 3
The agony of patience is a pain too strong
How can there be fairness when the world is wrong
The need of money isn't always greed
But most plans without it won't succeed
Repeat Chorus
Author notes
I am a songwriter and this song is about my struggle. It is a common story. This is a song for all the frustrated dreamers. Like Neil Diamond sings about a sad song cheering you up, well, let's hope this one will do that. CD is available at cost with 19 additional songs.
Hear it at http://putfile.com/andystephenson/media
Andy
Written January 11th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Dilapidator by Stand In Girl.
500 points, ended October 17, 2006, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Another strong song. and Im pleased it won a gold too
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This is a wonderful poem and When I go and hear it, I bet the song is even better. I have listened to quite a few of your songs and they are great. This piece cetainly did make me smile. I love the flow and the rhythm, and how it all just pranced along to the finish.
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This song Cheered Me Up
Genuinely good advice!
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I love the last stanza where you speak of fairness. It's what I've been thinking but haven't formed a coherent thought about, that is, I think, what makes a poem or song strong. Really nice write.
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Thanks
Thanks for stopping by, reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I really enjoy this song. It may never get anywhere, but it makes me feel better about the struggle. I'm glad you like this song.
Andy
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Ah yes, join the club of the frustrated dreamer, what a beautiful lyric you have penned here, but who knows sometimes being in the right place at the right time, anything can happen... never give up on the dream
Karen
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Thanks
Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I really appreciate it. I'm glad that you enjoy the lyrics. So far I've been at the right place at the right time once, but I did the wrong thing.
Andy
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Hmm, this captures the ache of dreams for me. I think too often people capture the fantasy and not enough of the ache.
Good writing.
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Thanks
Thanks for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. I am really pleased with the way this song turned out. I would be much happier if it were to sell. The music industry is very tough, or at least, it has been for me.
Andy
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great gift you have
Andy you always amaze me with these beautiful and deep rich writes it makes realize life is so much more than just getting through the hours but it's about really living. thank you
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Thanks Lady Gus
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I really appreciate it. Were you able to go to the link in the author's comments and hear these songs?
Andy
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excellent song.you are a talented songwriter.
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Thanks
Thanks for reading, commenting and all the applause. I'm glad you like the song, and thanks for the compliment.
Andy
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well...
Waiting for dreams that may never be
Trying to escape mediocrity
i especially likes this part.. its really good... keep writing stay safe
xx
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Thanks
Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. This song you can hear at the link in the author's comments. I'm very pleased that you like this one.
Andy
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beautiful write
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Thanks, Tony
Did you listen to the song? The link is in the author's comments. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Andy
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Awesome lyrics, the flow was great.
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Another great theme for music. Ballad lyrics really work well with this, I've heard. Have you ever written in 4-3-4-3 meter in quatrain form? Someone told me that this particular meter works well with music. Have you ever tried this? I don't write music for poems so I don't know how this works. What do you think?
John Carney
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Thanks, John
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. Did you listen to this song? There is a link to it in the author's comments.
I don't know if I have used 4-3-4-3 meter or not. I don't know what it means.
Andy
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dream on father!
in the very bestest way.
No plans to honor, but the dreams I build
I won't stop trying till my heart is stilled
oo, congratulations for your winning the bronze
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Thanks
Thanks for reading, commenting and all the applause. Did you go to the link and hear the song? This song describes the struggle. I wonder what it would be like to succeed?
Andy
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I agree w/vishnu 12, fab.
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Thanks, Fallower
Did you listen to the song? The link to the song is in the author's comments.
Andy
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hi
i just read your wonderful spectacular and and all the other words describing it is cool.it is fabulous.i think i have to stop admiring.anyways please,please read my poems and once again i love your poem.i have a feeling you are the only remaining descendent of william shakespeare.this is cool.
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Thanks, Vishn
You are so flattering you made me laugh. If William thought I was one of his descendents he'd probably be doing flips in his grave. I am really a poor poet, but I am a better song writer. This happens to be one of my songs. You can click the link in author's comments and hear it if you like.
Andy
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I like your thoughts in this one very much. Don't ever give in to mediocrity...
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Thanks, Scarlet
Thanks for all the applause. It is hard not to give in sometimes. Did you listen to this one? The link is in the author's comments.
Andy
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nice song, great lyrics...and i loke the story that it tells. and one thing - when a poem is meant for lyrics, i like to see the rhythm changed around JUST a tiny bit...a bridge or something, so to speak. it's great how it is now, but i believe it could be that much better is there was something in there to liven' it up a tad. thanks for entering my contest. i enjoyed readin this.
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No bridge to this song. Just chorus - verse, chorus - verse. It is much more powerful with music or read aloud. In the recording it has an instrumental bridge, but that can't be heard in the lyrics. Thanks for hosting the contest. I hope you really enjoy it.
Andy
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Thanks, Rachel.
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congrts on the silver!
best,
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Stand In Girl, I would say that you pretty well understand the song. It is one of my favorites. I am trying to find a publisher for it and my other songs. I have produced a CD. If you should know anyone, I'd appreciate any assistance you can provide. It is a rock song.
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I would say that you pretty well understand the song. It is one of my favorites. I am trying to find a publisher for it and my other songs. I have produced a CD. If you should know anyone, I'd appreciate any assistance you can provide. It is a rock song.
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I can't think of anything to suggest, it seems polished enough, and as a song, I like it.
My favorite line was the first in the last stanza. Overall it gives a wistful message of trying to overcome barriers, like not having enough cash (last two lines). I think that's the message, that and trying to escape every day routine and make something more of yourself. I don't know but that's what I thought, hopefully that'll help some way. I wish I could say more, I just don't know how. :[ -
I am glad you like the songs, Dreamer. They are available at cost on CD @ $3 which includes shipping and handling in the USA. There are 20 songs on the CD.
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Wow, I really like this piece. Everything fits in perfectly and the rhyming rocks. Being the dreamer that I am, this drew me in to hear something someone else had to say! Great job, and good luck in the contest.
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this is great, i love it, thanks for the entry and good luck
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Nice!much appreciated!
Captured the 'nessecities' that the world makes us strive for. I really liked it, felt incomplete maybe? I got the feeling that finishing with just another chorus wasn't what you had in mind. The words hit home though and that's what counts
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so awesome! great piece! it kept on topic and was easy to understand. awesome.
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Yes, I would call it a rock song. That would be a good description of it. It is on an album I released with 19 other songs if you would like to hear it. It is available on cassette. I am glad that you like it.
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that was very very good. when i was reading it i felt so much rock. i sort of think its a rock song. is it? but if its not what is it. you did a wonderful job writing your piece. well done! good luck and thanx for entering.
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You were right. Somehow, your poem remindes me of my own as well. It indeed has this vibe that is just incredible. This would make an awsome rock song. Very nice! Rock on!
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Thought Provoking
I have noticed that sometimes while we are looking back grieving for this or that...or looking down thinking miracles and dreams haven't come true we miss opportunities. Then a big shocker happens and in 20/20 hindsight you can see that many opportunities did present themselves and the opportunity just not seen. What I mean is when we hope and pray for miracles and dreams and wishes to come true we have to believe that they will or we won't recognize opportunities when they do present themselves. And just keep seeing in 20/20 hindsight, "oops there went another chance." At least, that's my experience and to explain would take a novel.
May we all be blessed with 20/20 foresight, faith and not fear, and look up once in awhile to see our dreams and wishes come true.
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It's wonderful!!...great write . I never stop dreaming 'cuz I know one day my dreams would come true....so to you ..keep on dreaming...keep on writin'
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