a child riding in a car
simple engouh
he sits with his three year old hands
folded in his lap
clutching the gameboy bought by two loving
thoughtful parents
now only one
one front seat is occupied
the other is empty
where she used to sit, gone
once there were two
now only one
Author notes
where did mommy go... ?
I wrote this from my son's perspective...
Written January 11th, 2005
A contest entry
- . . . (dot dot dot) by kibitz.
302 points, ended January 19, 2005, 20 entries
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Life's tough questions...
Hugs...Eddy
simple (engouh)
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writing from the perspective of your son made this more poignant... and it had that air of sorrow heavy... pen on!!!
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Very Good
Kalifornia, Very good, it just leaves me wanting more..Thank you for sharing it...Kntryg -
Very short and sweet, but like you said it was from your son's persepctive. It is appropriate and has the questioning of a child. Or should I say, lack of questioning? Although im sure he misses her, is there more acceptance of the world without his mother as a kind of moving phase? Very good write, and I wish you all the best in the future.
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short, but very good.
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