Who is she, the face you see
With the hair blowing on the gentle breeze
The one who brings you to your knees
The one who just wants to be free
You talk together, she looks away
Plays games with everything you say
You wonder what she's done today
And wonder if she'll ever stray
You try to look in her eyes
To see if she's wearing a disguise
You think she tells a thousand lies
To hide the fact she always cries
You reach for her
To hold her
To kiss her
To tell her you love her
But still she tears you apart
The look in her eyes, it burns your heart
You know she knew it right from the start
That things would be too hard
So who is she, this girl you know
To this girl you want to go
And hope everything will be just so
Like her hair in the wind, you go with the flow.....
In a list
A contest entry
- Yem's Hoopin' an a Hollerin' Quasi-Random Lottery Contest. by Yemassee.
312 points, ended June 26, 2005, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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She sounds bewitching! But she also sounds like someone who would rip men's hearts out! But I know the passion and it is very strong, just like your poem!
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This is a beautiful piece. It doesn't have a lot of emotion which I like best but it flows and is very descriptive. I love the way you decribe this mystery girl. You make her sound so mysterious and beautiful. Keep writing great descriptive poems.
-Megan, MK, Dark -
Great!
That was a great poem. It almost sounds like a rap song with all the rhyming- and i mean that as a compliment! I could relate because I have done that to a guy. Defintally made me feel emotion! Amazing Job! -
this is marvelous! its so pretty yet sad...its very nice..great job!
thanks for entering and good luck!
psycho -
sad poem, but really awesome, great job!
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This is so sad.. i love it.. nice work.. i usually don't like poems that rhyme, but you really pulled it off.. awesome.
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That is gorgeous... Absolutely wonderful ... I am awestruck
Wonderful poem Duckie
~~Jessica Erin
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This is so lovely. I often have thoughts of lost souls, saving them and making them less lonely. This is a unique portrait of perhaps loneliness and misery projected into a person.
You defintely have talent.
Elizabeth
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LAURA THIS IS NOT ANGST! STOP PUTTING ANGST AS YOUR CATEGORY THING! *is exasperated* Love, Laura, this is love. Damn your brain.
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An excellent poem... well written... thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!!
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lovely
So beautiful and sad! Very very nice. -
Very emotional, an enjoyable read
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I feel the same way about the girl in the poem as access. does, i really liked the poem, there's a kind of mystery to it all most or to the girl.
Caf -
she is shy and hides it, love is there...
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Moving and strong. good
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i thought it was medicore, and your typical sad love poem. i did like how u did not identify the person but left it a mystery, although it can easily be implied that she is a girl who hurt you.
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Awww...this is so sad. I loved it though.
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ahhhhhhhhhh sad..
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