We took the long way home,
A blur of oncoming headlights
and sleeping semis on
sweeping midnight bypasses
And you were steadily accelerating
Moving so quickly,
you thought everyone around you
stood still,
The light too slow to follow.
'And if
I lose
my place
In line
I'll lose'
was blaring from the stereo.
We had bonded over Death Cab
and Transatlanticism -
an experience now branded,
tagged in my soul.
We had ogled the woman we were
going to become
"Keep the lines simple
and the colors sharp"
leaving room for whimsy and bows.
Remember the mechanical keyboarder?
She attacked it with a vengeance-
The opening act:
over zealously nerdy.
"They were the late blooming band geeks,"
I screamed over the synth
as our laughter rang with the cowbell.
The light flew to the lobby,
in sync with each bated breath,
as it replaced the entertainment
and DC slept alone tonight,
"So this is the New Year"
blasting from the speakers
and sweeping us off our feet.
An angelic voice
imposing on the power chords.
The Dueling bases,
gorgeous, with strength
My static lullaby.
And we stood there -
frozen, mesmerized
as we drew in quickened breaths
that we gave no opportunity to exhale,
taking no chance in losing our evening.
Claiming it all as ours.
We sat in the car on the highway
as the road led us home.
I whispered,
"that's a Beatles rip"
(and you knew exactly what I meant)
Too tired to move
to talk
brains poached
ears ringing
Yet our minds echoed the same lyrics
And we both knew they were identical.
Author notes
This is about a Death Cab for Cutie concert I attended with my best friend, and the experiences we shared together at that concert.....and the parallels between the music and our friendship. There are some lyrics from "The New Year", "Expo 86", and from The Postal Service (Ben Gibbard's side project). So, to sum it all it, this is dedicated to my best friend.
Written January 10th, 2005
A contest entry
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v good
wow.
its sooo great. wonderful imagery and feel to it
keep writing! -
Yes, I'm enamoured by the language and the feeling just dripping off every word... You're in the top 10.
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This is indeed stunning. A beautifully written poem that is filled with lovely imagery. This is indeed a treasure. Well done dear poet.
Good luck in the contest.
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FantaSTIQUE!!
THIS IS FANTASTIC!!!
I'VE WADED THROUGH A LOT OF ... WELL, YOU KNOW, TO FIND THIS SHINING GEM!
This is why I don't mind holding contests. My dear, this has too few comments. I do hope you plan to promote it. I'm going to add you to my favorites list and bookmark this. THank you so much for entering. IT was an honor to read of your experience wiht your best friend. THese are the moments to treasure before time or distance separates. Ah! Fantastic! thanks - you've made my evening of slogging through worth it.
This peice is tight and stays on course all the way through and is nicely wrapped up. -
top notch
Nice, Clean, Crisp... the wonderful part is that the all the venues are in sync as if the ride, the concert, and the memories were all traveling at the same time and speed. Beautiful delivery and what's more the tight control of line and image is most commendable... not an easy task to hold a long piece together. A most satisfying journey! -
This is great. I love Death Cab! I especially recognized a few things from this stanza:
And then the lights went out;
replacing the entertainment
as DC slept alone tonight,
“So this is the New Year”
blasting from the speakers
and sweeping us off our feet.
It was very familiar to me! Excellent job! Though you may want to fix a couple things in your author comments! Like a little quote!
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