The young mother rocks in chair
A plump child with off red hair
He watches the light, and prepares
To meet it at the center.
I'm at my desk watching the two
Figuring ways to misconstrue
And further shield them from the truth
There really is no center.
Fight I, the boy, no longer to destroy
What it is, I re-live, my heart instead I give
You bread and milk, then lullaby
Fear not, I'd under darker sky.
The fact is that I've met the end
And know how it makes all light bend
But light has never been my thing
I walk the night, where I am King.
Author notes
Written January 10th, 2005
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great job
I truely enjoyed this poem. The ending is what makes this a great read. thank you for sharing such an awsome write -
awesomene
"The fact is that I've met the end
And know how it makes all light bend
But light has never been my thing
I walk the night, where I am King."
this is a killer ending..realy makes the whole thing come to gether..it all spilled out as a neat little story..i realy enjoyed it.GREAT WRITE
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Oh my god ... this is like nothing i've ever read before and I dont think i know any words to describe what i'm feeling after reading this except just to say that this is a true masterpiece in every style and meaning of the word, and has left me completely in awe of you ... Absolutely fantastic, this piece came alive!
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I'd like to know more about the speaker. Is he/she a friend? relative? what's the relationship to the mother and the boy? the language is GORGEOUS, the rhyme not forced, i felt just a few hiccups in the rhythm. The speaker's voice intrigues me... I want to know more!!
--PE
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well written
beautifully written and thought provoking. i am impressed. the rhyme scheme change at the end was well taken in...and i think for alot of people it threw them off...but i think it fits just fine. i hope to read more of your writes. well done, babe. -Sable- -
The rhyme in this piece has been mastered, the traditional sound gives strength to the rather striking imagery I enjoyed the sound the messages and the somewhat early ninteenth century feel to this.
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Very orginal! And....oh, man! How it flowed! GREAT JOB!
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great job. the meaning is hiden in the maze of words and it fits.
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Very nice... It really seemed to speak to me ^^
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i really dig this piece. its timing is precise in that i was able to capture the experiences taking place throughout the piece. I also like the abstract qualities of thought that appear repeatedly, where human expression becomes so poetic...and real, just as it is...and fear is an acceptable sensation...that is very reaffirming...if you dig.
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Very interesting write that keeps the reader's attention... at least mine! I don't write rhyme myself so I found it interesting that upon first noticing the rhyme existed I also noticed it suddenly didn't.... and then did....lol... you kept me going on this one. I think I'll stick to haiku.....lol
Don -
i8t was the change of the rhyme pattern that made it intriguing for me.this must be more of the softer side of horus since it comes across as deeply thought provoking but gentle.i don't expect you to respond.you never do.
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This was really cool. I like your use of words and sort of the hidden meanings in them... good job.
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Are they the victims, the boy and his mother, or are you? Very interesting. I can see I will have to come back a time or two more, to fully grasp the meaning of this one. Enjoying the challenge, and the tease!
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Great Potential
Hello...Theres a lot of potential here for a riveting subject and story line, I felt what weakened it was the abrupt change up from a set rhyme scheme and rhythm of S1, S2, then came S3 with a disruptive meter and a lacking of end-rhymes that have been established and even the language used went from modern day to archaic. Perhaps there is some underlying meaning to this change? If so, I am not sure if it works to the best interest of the poem. I do rather like the images you begin S1 with, there is a sense of drama beneath the surface, a turmoil in a peaceful moment about to erupt. I thought the voice also compliments the poem over all. Good luck, Liz -
woh. that flowed so beautifuly it was unbelievable-i can see why yu are featured. i mean, it was like a beautifully woven string of words and metaphore to convey an otherwise simple story - the bitter-sweet happiness clouding the sadness... i don't know exactly what struck me about it, but it was more than "good"
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Thank you William, I have two sons, and you?
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well i am a father and for me this really struck home... the first two stanza's put tears in my eyes.... brilliant work...
billy -
Very interesting. I will have to come back and read this again, I think, in order to get the full meaning. You have certainly caught my interest.
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What's the deal today?
I have read many excellent pieces today
And defintly ur piece is strongly one of them
He watches the light, and prepares
To meet it in the center.
Excellent image
Awesome work!
Well done...
~Imad
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