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Iam Sorry

None of This would have happened
If he would have just shut his mouth
he turned you against me
Hurting me so Bad
Am Sorry
I never did anything with him
Why he says what he says
I don't Know
Am Sorry Jason
I Love you so much
And without out you
Would drive me Insane
you Just being Mad at me for a day
Kills me
I can't Sleep
I can't Eat
Am Sorry

I Love You Jason 10*27*04

Author notes

This Is Just something That Was On my mind. i just wanted to say i was sorry to my boyfriend
Written January 9th, 2005

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  • Princess2006
    February 14, 2005
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    This is really sweet. I know how you must have felt. I have been in that same place. I am not sure what was said to your boyfriend to upset you but I know that I had someone tell my boyfriend that I had cheated on him when I didn't. I could never do that. I love him way to much. Needless to say he broke up with me and we were apart for almost three months. He realized that I could never do that to him and he asked me out again and totaly appologized. We are together now and have been for about two weeks. I still love him as much as I did when we were first together.
    I hope everything worked out for you in the end. Your a good writter so keep it up.
    God Bless,
    Kate


  • astralshepherd gold member
    February 14, 2005
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    As a personal expression of your experience, this is a first rate attempt at getting to the feelings you have. Your rhythm is very good and well thought out. I hope that he has forgiven you. Back to the poem, you have a gift of being able to express yourself freely in this poetic form...do not squander it but cherish it and nature it as you would a tender flower. With time the plant will grow and bloom as nature intended, until that time i want to encourage you to tend to the growing part of this. The best, the absolute Best way to do that is write. Write as if you have all the time in the world and no time left at all. Write with urgency and passion. I can see that in between the lines of what you write here...there is SO much more for you to explore in this world and write about. So get to it. Write. Write lots. But have fun. Blessings and best wishes, ~richard