Achoo! The pollen tickled Inky's nose.
Then he heard a giggle,it came from a pale pink rose.
A little face appeared and said"what a funny sight.
If the elves could see you now,you'd give them such a fright."
Inky shook his head, gold pollen flew all around
Then he stopped to listen:what was that other sound?
It was a robin redbreast, who sat upon a bough:
"Now the pollen's left your face,you look much better now.
Owl awoke from slumber,stretched his wings and said,
"Do you have to make so much noise?you made me leave my bed":
Inky's great blue eyes opened very wide:
"I've never seen these things before,I was always locked inside".
Owl scratched his head and said"ah! you're the little one
That fairies rescued from the land where never shines the sun."
Inky looked around,such wonders were in site:
Coloured flowers of every hue bathed in a golden light.
The fairy of the rose took Inky's paw in hand,
"Come with me and you'll see this is fairy land"
A little elf reading a book on a toadstool sat,
Dressed in green and, on his head a red and gold belled hat.
"Look" said the fairy",that's the fairy King.
And over there the fairy choir,listen how they sing":
Inky was very tired"I'm hungry" they heard him say.
"I think I will now go home and return another day"
Author notes
B.
Written January 9th, 2005
A contest entry
- BEST PREWRITTEN CHILDRENS STORY OR POEM by Snowing Kisses.
700 points, ended January 30, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My Little Angel by Kal-El.
600 points, ended March 7, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this is really a great entry thanks
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this is beautiful, very sweet a real classic thanks
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This will inchant her I am sure
thank you
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This garnered 38 kisses in its first read at the Mother Goose Hour group.
It was read in a finals round on Monday night to a group of 77 children where it was bestowed an additional 60 kisses! Well done! -
Another great piece, loved the lyrical feel and the flow is awesome. I am sure the kids will love it. Keep your pen forever flowing and good luck st judging!
Bunny
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Yeah another inky one. I will bookmark both...Thanks, Trina. Let me know if Inky ever gets to ride the dragonfly. I am so hooked...Thanks, Trina.
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Well, the pollen is certainly out in force this week so this is good timing... we'll see what the Mother Goose Hour group has to say over the weekend...
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a brilliant poem.this is my first contest i thought you could only enter one poem per contest sorry i should of wrote that in my rules but i didnt know I will have to delete 2 of your poems.thank-you.
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very pretty poem, but a bit too long. Thank you fro enetring my contest
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everytime I read about Inky I smile thank you for entering this in my contest. I love your story poems and I think my little brother liked this one too. I had fun reading it to him anyway
good luck
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Hi, thanks a million, big hug Di
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This one is so great too because I can see pictures in my head every time I read this and it is so pretty and cute.
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Hi, thanks a million, hugs Di
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What an adorable tale turned children's story. The rhyming and flow were both excellent. (Congratulations on your publication by the way!
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Thanks for entering and good luck!!!
Kate
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Hi thanks a million, hugs Di
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This was adorable, I love that you made a children's story. I always like reading those from this site. The rhyming was great, and so was the flow. This was a cute little story.
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aaah thats cute!!!bless!
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I love this character very very much.. another great piece. well done hun. love lolly x
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I am so serious. If you find a talented artist to illustrate inky and put only two lines per page, this could really work. And i'd buy it for my children. I wonder how much shipping would be from italy to american.hmmm.
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aww a wonderful and delightful childrens story indeed I read this to my daughter and she giggled. So thumbs up and good luck. thank you for entering
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Hi Haran, thank you so much for your great critique, this is part of a book for children, and it is great fun writing it. hug
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What a lovely little tale of Inky! A wonderful and enchanting story told about this cat, nicely done, and all the best in the contest, thanks again for entering, Ann
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lol wow big up Inky !!!! you are very talented
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Hi Willow, many thanks for your super critique and applause, yes of course you can print them off and read them to the little one, it will make me feel good if he likes them big hug
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I hope that Inky keeps speaking to you about his adventures through Fairy Land. I will be checking back to read more poems from you at a later date.
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Hi Mr Vertigo, many thanks,yes it is part of a book, not as easy as it seems.again thank you
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ah, i alwyas keep my word dear.
i like your little Inky charactor, i hope you are making this a series and we will see more.
these are very sweet, perfect childrens rhymes.
we need more things like this on AP.
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Dragondancer, you are such a lovely person, do keep in contact, you made me smile. thanks a million
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Great
Aww...I like Inky...he's just so...innocent, shall we say? Cute. It was absolutely perfectly created. I so love this Inky character you have here...when does he meet up with the wizard, I wonder? Ah, perhaps I am reading them out of turn...ah well, no big deal. Where exactly is Inky going in way of his "home?" He isn't thinking of returning to that witch creature is he? I should hope not. I love this story-poem like thing you have here...makes my attempt at such look absolutely horrid (no big deal, because I like just writting regularly anyway) Off to the third one now! Tally-hoe!
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Again, I say brilliant! I hope that you win this contest because you sure deserve it. This is another wonderful Inky poem. I can't say enough about how well you are doing with this series. Your imagination is simply wonderful! Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us here at allpoetry! ***smiles*** ~Melissa
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Once again, this is so cute! Another one to use for a bedtime story. I love it!
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Hi, thank you very much
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Cute lol...very cute. Keep it up.
~Smidge~ 
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Hi SL, THANKS A MILLION
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Nice poem. I can see small children loving it. Good job.
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Simply superb
crystaldust 09-01-05 22:54
You've done it again! I'm glad you're making an Inky collection? It really is such fun and clever and excellently done.Just keep 'em coming, please. lol
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