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this is america

its disapointing to see the us fall apart
but it was doomed from the start
centuries have went by
with minimal to no change
but to americans its not strange
it stared with the slaves
dragged from africa
to be sent on a long journey
from land to sea
and back to land again
no knowledge of the culture
but daily they got tortured
but when at sea it was worse
cocaine was dipersed
to give adrenalin to the slaves
so they will work harder for days
while the white man was srung out too
then tension between the races grew
it grew and grew til they reached land
and thats where the war between the races began
the negros and whites strung out and want to fight
isnt it sad how the times have never changed
now there are gangs and still crack in the black community
dave chappelle wasnt lying when he said this
blacks have been hooked on crack
for hundreds of years
people shed tears
but their stories disappear
but racism exsists everyday and everywhere
for what you do
or what you wear
money the root of all evil
greed the demon in many people
why is technology so advanced
but out humanitiy is much less
i gueess human interaction isnt cool anymore
thats why many races we ignore
why are so easily permiated
when you cant go to france
if your passport is out dated
or if your mane isnt stated
but if i came from mexico or out of the us
i get citizenship benefits and a place to live
no important info or no one questions
but i could be a terrorist
trying to detroy homeland protection
it would be easier to live here since i am not a native
and not spend my life dying to live a dream
take the detour route in the fast lane
while the native or americans complain
so is this why americans are insane
because they dont get life in the fast lane
while everyone else feels ashamed
this is america land of the free
but nothing is for you or me
so why come to a country full of greed
if thats not what you need





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Written January 8th, 2005

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  • LostCause25
    January 10, 2005
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    Nice job here. I like how it was history oriented and the fact that you actually watched the History Channel =) Good use of words too. *Liz*

  • jaded soul
    January 8, 2005
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    I like this one, it was long, but good, you included alot of good reasons why America sucks sometimes, i like it. i like how you included the native americans, because i dont think they get enuf credit, and quite frankly, this is really their country, not ours, we abuse this land. you are an inspired writer and i would love to do a callaboration with you sometimes.
    JO

  • Happy j
    January 8, 2005
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    it very disappointing to beause the coke and slaves spiel is true! the history chanel! thx fot the comment. i remember the program. that pissed me off

  • pruedence
    January 8, 2005
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    Nice vent of words...with good meaning...sad, but I think we have all written a poem on this subject...you would think we would be heard...thanks for sharing _