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Twirling and Swirling

Twirling and swirling:

I am lost an the ocean with a whale of memories
staying afloat by the sour taste of salt,
which is dried to my skin and stuck on my tongue.
Out in the middle without a raft!
I can see a shark coming up for a bite
When something suddenly grabs my leg.
Under I go twirling and swirling
Inside this whale of memories.

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Written October 28th, 1987

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  • Darr Kingston
    January 7, 2005
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    Sugar-And-Spice - Thank you for reading as i enjoy your thougths on my writings.


  • aRdNeK
    January 7, 2005
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    Kewl poem! I like how you say your memories are like being out in the ocean without a raft, and then a shark comes after you. Good job! Keep writing!