Bloody corpses on the floor
And I'm screaming your name
For some help to clean this mess I made
Dead flies in the window seal
Cobwebs on the ceiling
Blood stains all over my shirt
No, I really don't have much to say
Dragonflies buzzing
Crows flying everywhere
Can I get you some more lemonade?
Looking in you're frozen eyes
Fixing the broken windows
That you and I have seem to make
Dead birds cover the yard
Cats come to feast
Putting you in new clothes
Now what would you like for dinner?
Looking in the mirror
Wondering where the hell i'm at
Watching the mascara dry on my face
Whiping the blood off my hands and walls
Wonder if I should bleach my clothes......
Putting the cleaned knife under my pillow
Changing into something new
Watching you lay frozen on the floor
I wonder when you'll stop bleeding....
I've asked you many times to help me
To help me clean this mess I've seem to make
But now you must suffer for your promises you've broken
You and her both
I wonder what time I'll meet her tonight.....
Author notes
Written January 6th, 2005
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Wow, this is the most AMAZING freaking poem I've read in a while..whoa, it's kick ass. I love the lines..."Looking in you're frozen eyes
Fixing the broken windows
That you and I have seem to make." They just really stood out for me. Great Job here. I absolutely love it. You're one hell of a writer. Keep it up!
Rachel -
lol thanks for the complement and the applaud....! very much appreciated.
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sweet! i love this. it's kool how you talk to the corpse and ask it to help you clean up it's own blood. it's like you're not phased at all by what you've done. quite kool. plus, i like how you ended it with wondering when you'll visit the girl. it foreshadows that you're going to kill her as well. yay for revenge!
anyways, this kicks a**. nice job.
laterz,
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hey Courtney this is really good and it seems like something that i have wanted to do for a while. and pore hillary is going to thank about it forever lol or atleast until u tell her lol. anyway this is a great write. i g2g love you so much.. misss you and and hillary so much lol.
love Tiffany -
lol don't think too hard lol.
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u did??? i thought u were writing something lol ok......... im really going to think bc its going to be on my mind all night ok its a guy and a girl we know ummmmm young? old? friend? enemy? me? ummmm lol........... god im really going to be thinking.......... love ya
hillary*
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hehehehe yes it was a murder fantasy..hhehehe. i wrote it in world studies yesturday. heheheee.yes the crows had to be in there lol. loves ya too but i can't tell u who this is about, then i would be revealing the secret...u have to focus on it, focus and u will know.... lol. but don't hurt yorself lol.
love ya
courtney -
well....... i kinda had to read it twice and found out ur talking to the courpse lol im a dumbass so dont mind me....... that was really good and was it a fantasy u were having about revenge on someone? sounds intereting....... lol...... if i can help just say so. ahhhhhhhh..... of course the crows had to be there. there every were muhahahahahahahahahahahaha....... but anyways great poem love ya
hillary* -
lol thank you.
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Hey Nice Write
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