‘Just one more’ he said
before he pushed her to the ground
‘Just one more’ he said
as she lay shaking and bleeding
‘Just one more’ he said
to drown out his children’s cries
‘Just one more’ he said
before he told them a barrage of lies
‘Just one more’ he said
whilst he got into the car
‘Just one more’ he said
as he knocked her to the ground
‘Just one more’ he said
when he drove off and left her for dead
‘Just one more’ he said
as he made it all her fault
‘Just one more’ he said
as he stood before the court
‘Just one more’ he said
when he was free to do it again
‘Just one more’ he said
to retain respect from his friends
‘Just one more’ he said
as he pushed her to the ground
‘Just one more’ he said
as the life support machine stopped
making that sound
‘Just one more’ he said
‘Where’s the harm in that?
It’s not hurting anyone, after all.
It’s not hurting anyone, after all.’
Author notes
Written January 6th, 2005
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Once is never enough...once more is even more of never enough
A cleverly written piece, and the repetitive first line in each stanza certainly drives home the point.
Good job, strong message
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Part of this is a mirror of my own life from before when I was abused. I really like this. I wish you wrote more often, but when you do I'm never let down! Great job on this. I liked it.
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This is very sad, but true. I like the ending in particular, because it emphasizes how he doesn't know how much damage he's doing.
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Great poem...honestly paints the injustices of Life that some unfortunate persons face- Captivating.
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Very scary and sad.
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at first the just one more lines hit me as way too repetitive, but after finishing it, it does have a sense of emphasizing the point, it's simple, but powerful
enjoyed it
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yeah, stuff like that sucks, but I really liked the way you told this it was quite clever and effective. good write
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*hugs* powerful poem! Things like this shouldn't happen, unfortunately they do, great poem. Keep writing
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