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Why?

Why is pain directed at the heart?
When the knife slips the hearts the only thing cut.

Why do we make people suffer?
We all suffer inside.

Why do we hate?
What we need is to release pain.



 

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Another first please dont trash it just constructive will do
Written January 6th, 2005

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  • Xxxxxxxxx
    March 22, 2006
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    Forever Haunting

    the eternal begining to infinite questions of endless hurt.
    i really like this one,everyone has thought these same things,any one who says they havent is a liar (or a droid)
    -cheers


  • Angel Aeris
    January 24, 2005
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    Thank you so much for your comment and i will look into the "Heart is.." thing.


  • Triste
    January 21, 2005
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    I really liked this poem. The questions presented were ones that made me sit back and actually think about what you were presenting me with. One suggestion I would have is to maybe keep it "heart is"... just for clarity. Really, though, this just makes me think about a lot of things, and I always like that from a poem. Keep it up.
    -Renae.


  • BlooQKazoo
    January 18, 2005
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    again pretty cool! i luv you - you write amazing stuff! you can write stories and poetry - talent!!! xxxxxxx


  • Angel Aeris
    January 13, 2005
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    Thank you


  • Lifesamystery
    January 13, 2005
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    i like this. its a well constructed piece. they r very important questions with well thought out answers. keep up this good work! Pete

  • Angel Aeris
    January 7, 2005
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    Your cool man i love FFVII but i do like FFVIII too, my fave characters from them are Aeris, sephiroth, Squall and Rinoa.

  • Senshaij
    January 6, 2005
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    great

    Another great poem... they really are the best written when done at the spur of the moment and you don't even really think about it. Please, keep writing... Your poems are awesome!

    ~PS~

    Oh, and FFVII is pretty good, but FFVIII... I dunno I like it better, I think Squall's a better character than Cloud, even though Quistis is my favourite in FFVIII... you're right, 10-2 is just... there no word for it...
    Edited on Jan 06, 8:20 because ''.


  • Angel Aeris
    January 6, 2005
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    Thank you for saying that an FINAL FANTASY RULES!!! but i dont like 10 or 10 -2 7 Is the best.

  • Naraku No Hana
    January 6, 2005
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    This is so true. In just a few short lines you were able to put emotion and sense into this. It was great.


  • wishintreeUK
    January 6, 2005
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    Thought provoking poem!

    A good constructive question Angel Aeris, the heart is the seat of motivation, that is why when we suffer pain or anguish of any kind, we hurt so much. Also, the reverse is true, when we have joy and experience good things, the heart feels joyful and we have the benefit of that too.
    Well Done! a few words with so much meaning!
    ~Katie~

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