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O' Wench, My Wench

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You can whip and you can smack.
You can tie me to the rack.
Just don't leave me hanging there.
It's important that you care.

You can twist and you can pinch.
You can bite me inch by inch.
As long as you nibble nice,
Our love-making will suffice.

You can grab and you can squeeze.
I enjoy a playful tease.
Just please do it with a smile
And I'll deem it all worthwhile.

You can pull and you can yank.
You can even, frankly, spank.
Bruises only cut me deep
When the seeds aren't sown to reap.

Just make me the guarantee
That you won't ever leave me.
And I'd gladly die today
If I was to be your prey.







~Gold~Winner

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I'm ALL yours baby.... but only if I'm yours forever.








This poem was an entry in the contest: allpoetry.com/Contest/981148






Written January 5th, 2005

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  • DarkFenixBoi
    February 18, 2005
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    Spankin' good poem!!!

    Ha! This is a great one! Very clever and funny, and I see it got the girls attention and won you the prize. That's so cool. I guess so many guys are so busy being bad, htey never think how fun it would be to let the girl be bad and just be devoted to her. Pretty cool angle.


  • SmokeFollowsBeauty
    February 16, 2005
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    Just make me the guarantee
    That you won't ever leave me.
    And I'd gladly die today
    If I was to be your prey.

    Beautiful. Your an amazing poet and your officially going on my favorites. I love your ways of rhyming your absolutely amazing. Beautiful piece!


  • iamfromabove
    January 19, 2005
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    Hope your on your knees now you won the gold (which I must say was deserved) They gona be after your booty now Mia


  • cosmicrose
    January 18, 2005
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    That's the part that scared the hell out of me personally. The last time someone told me they wanted it to last forever... they had fangs and only visited at night. I'll stick with the short termers myself. Otherwise... they just wear out too dawg gone easy for that forever stuff when I'm doin the drivin... shall I say.
    Edited on Jan 18, 3:29 p.m. because ''.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 18, 2005
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    I think the, "Your's Forever did it". Congratulations!!


  • jantastic gold member
    January 15, 2005
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    I do see an underlying tone of diligent obedience in your words, I'm sure you could be well trained.


  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    January 15, 2005
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    Commitment may be a long word, but in my heart it's asking the bare minimum.


  • ms-cuddles
    January 14, 2005
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    Naughty

    This is great but aren't you asking for a bit too much? I mean the Cabana Boys take what is given to them...lol I believe that you will do nicely though. Good luck in the contest. ~Cuddles


  • Catressa gold member
    January 14, 2005
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    cracking up this was too cute.. Good Luck in the Contest, Catressa


  • Shameless1 silver member
    January 14, 2005
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    LMAO...nicely done...this is hilarious...I'm sure all the wenches are gonna have a heyday with you seeing as you such a willing participant...LOL...good write..nice flow...keep it "up" otherwise you'll be beaten severly...LMAO

  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    January 11, 2005
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    Where have all the women with emotions and feelings gone? This contest is like the twilight zone. Just as I've finally allowed myself to become a more sensitive individual... society changes on me and I'm left in the dust.


  • Venessa
    January 11, 2005
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    Okay wench sisters I think your getting soft. Since when do we allow our cabana boys to set the terms of our use of them? Dear Poet if you are planning to stay with one wench forever then I laugh and if you think its gonna be Em then I laugh harder (because she breaks her boys ) Love the write very funny!!


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    January 11, 2005
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    We will be contacting you very soon to make sure to add you to our extensive storage of cabana boys and wenches in training... lol

    I absolutely love this! You make pain...well... pleasurable It resonates of dark fantasies hidden deep within yourself, and as we wenches are always whipping, chaining and brusing our boys whenever they get on our damn nerves... this is the intended mindset that they are supposed to have! I like the rhyme and tone of this... very well done. If from no one else, you receive high marks from me.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • J Rhys Davies
    January 11, 2005
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    Nice job on this. I bet all the wenches have your number for sure after reading this one.

    ~ John


  • Dreamweaver silver member
    January 7, 2005
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    Good rythm and rhyme you have here ... flows along like a stream ... well written ...
    Best of luck in the contest,
    Take care,
    Sammy

  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    January 7, 2005
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    }}}}} times are a' changin' {{{{{

    I'm more sensitive on an emotional level than a physical one. I think it's quite a turnabout how now I'm almost being chastised by women because of that.


  • cosmicrose
    January 7, 2005
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    Too many rules... how dare you?


  • poetryality silver member
    January 7, 2005
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    Well--I--ahh-umm-this--is --the BOMB ASS POEM!!! Now, PsydewaysTears I always knew you were naughty, yes, this is nice, naughty. I remeember when I used to---oh well, never mind. I think I need you ladies to PASS ME SOME OF THE ICE!!! Now that I have removed all of my outer graments, I NEED SOME ICE!!! Great, ahh--did I say... GREAT! Oh yes--okay...

    Renee


  • Blind-Ambition
    January 6, 2005
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    haha good job.


  • Pamela
    January 6, 2005
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    That's what I'm here for LOL


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 6, 2005
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    I know! I was trying not to think of that! Now you've done it dammit! Grrr...


  • Pamela
    January 6, 2005
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    Ice is a good thing...if ya...nevermind..
    ok...i'll go too! lol


  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 6, 2005
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    Yeah sweet sister wench, go suck on some.... uhhh... ice! Yeah! That's it! ICE!!


  • kjack
    January 6, 2005
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    Shall I go get the handcuffs now, or do we want to use the something soft to tie him up. Youwza, I think I am beginning to like this kind of thing. I know, I'll get the chocolate syrup and whipped cream. Ain't nothing like a little dessert after a good meal. Great job on this one. It gets me in the mood to.....(clears throat). I need to cool down now since I am at work and can't be getting all bothered like this. I'll just go suck on some ice.

    becca

  • Touchof1der silver member
    January 6, 2005
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    OOH La La... Let's tie this one spread eagle on the floor ladies! He's very eager and willing. Good behavior is always rewarded by the wickedly wanton wenches. Great entry. Good luck in the contest. Lick, Lick,
    ~Kimberly

  • kjack
    January 6, 2005
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    I am speechless. I'll have to come back later to comment on this. I still can't get the right words out. All I can say now is "I LOVE IT".

    becca

    "sticks and stones may break my bones but whips and chains excite me."
    I heard that one when I was younger


  • emancipation
    January 6, 2005
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    indeed.... now that was some wenchy luvin!! very good work cabana boy!!!
    thanks for entering & good luck!!

  • Pamela
    January 5, 2005
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    I very much enjoyed the author's comment
    Lordie..i'm thinking seriously about crossing over from...me to her (the pic) nevermind!..you have no need to understand anything i just said
    way to go!
    ~Pamela


  • Springheel
    January 5, 2005
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    Yeah. This poem beats the hell out of mine. Ladies and gentlemen, I believe we have the winner of the contest.

  • Sweet Briar
    January 5, 2005
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    bend over time for your spanking so you say I can nipple if I am nice hmmm I am only nice at times so ask yourself do you feel lucky well do ya!

    Thank you for entering the contest!

    Jenn

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    January 5, 2005
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    I think I shall swoon and fall now . Just kidding. The title gave me a naughty clue before opening this to read. I don't even want to imagine what inspired you to write this but it is just the sort of pick me up poem I like . Best wishes... ~genielassie~

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