Please Jesus give me back the life I’ve lost.
Please Jesus show me how much it costs.
Please Jesus renew my life.
Please Jesus show me what’s right.
Please Jesus forgive all my sins.
Please Jesus save me again.
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Written January 5th, 2005
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I love your poem
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a good rhyming poem
We all gotta find hope in something to make it & cope with life...i like your rhyming style...keep up the good work & check out some of mine sometime...Keep shining!!! -
So short, so simple. Yet it's so powerful, desperate and sad. Well written. .I know-my comment is mush compared to the others. .
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Excellent
This poem is so beautiful, sweet and sincere. You are baring your heart for the world to see. Great job! I look forward to reading more of your work. Take care and God bless.
Ps I also filled out an application for your group but I haven't recieved a response yet. I am hoping to hear from you soon. -
Great poem..i think that at times we all feel like we need to be renewed and be saved "again". I loved ur poem. keep up the great work!
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its very beautiful...im glad that there are still christians out there,besides me..i love this,and i am sure to read more of your work! excellent job! keep it up!
love ya
~Chelsea
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Beautiful and inspiring.
You know the graphic is very beautiful and yes when you ask he does save you and all heaven rejoices over one that has returned or just one that asks this in his name. I believe that when we do it happens and never let anyone put down your belief for any reason. So well done and powerful, it is inspiring as well and I will come back to this to applaud as soon as I answer messages. -
I am new to your work. I could not have chosen a better poem to start off with in my opinion. I have read your author page....well..some of it if you wish for the honest truth
I was sold on you...right away. I could feel the sincerity within your words...and I appreciated your love for Christ immediately.
I love this poem..it is beautiful. I think this is something we all need to ponder upon every once in a while. We are all only human..and we all make mistakes everyday, which we are all in need of God's mercy, grace and forgiveness.
I shall be reading more of your work...great...job with this one.
LIZ -
very very nice! simple and sweet! ya no jesus is always forgiving and he most certainly will save you! thts why he died for us... god bless ya n stay safe
xx
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I love this. It is such a simple and easily understood outcry to God. It IS that simple. Ask and you recieve, it is man that makes it all seem complicated. God Bless
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Thanks for the comment.
I did edit my poem just a little, but actually I wanted this to be a very simple poem, not to deep on the outside, but with deep meaning on the inside.
Shannon :-) -
Wow! This plea to God was so meaningful, so yearning. If you really do pray this to God, I hope things work out!
~LiSa~ -
Sometimes it feels as though we must call upon god, jesus or whatever we believe in for guidence or in your case help. Is this a desperate cry for help? Do you feel lost in your own world and are in desperate need of assistance? I hope to god and anyone who is looking out for the world that you are saved and helped out for whatever reason you may need it.
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You've got the potential, I can see it. Try diving deeper into your thoughts and choose your words carefully. Doing so will not only make your poetry better, but will also teach you to express yourself better in your poetry as well. Keep writing!
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Jesus is the way truth and light eh
please Jesus help me too... apperently through you at the moment... that's soo beautifully in simplicity... i'm gonna write it down in my notebook with props to you so thanks... it seems like it would be set to a melody and just work so beautifully as lyrics of meditation...
i'm quite touched without a doubt as i try and renew my spiritual life... thankyou for sharing... you are awesome... God does provide the rock of our foundation...
it's weird... i feeling so weird lately... accepting God takes a moment... but... you write give back my life... dude... he already did when he died and rose again... you been saved every day...
actually that alone seems like a fitting title... saved every day... but it's up to you... the only other suggestion i'd add to this is end it with a hearty amen... i'm serious... just as simple to make it into a prayer... thanks
God bless
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Amen....be encouraged my brother....knowing that God has heard your cry...even though we may not communicate as often as I would like....you are always in my prayers...God will restore you....you latter house shall be much greater than your former house...so forget those things which are behind and continue to press towards the mark...
When you get a chance read Hebrews 11...Deuteronomy 31...and Joshua 1 -
This is so short and so good and so powerful. Jesus can do everything in the poem. He's so awesome. Thanks for sharing.
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Very Good.
This is really awesome! I love the simpleness of the poem, but yet the words are so strong. Awesome Write. -
excellent
Shannon, this is very beautiful! It is something I pray to God too because I seem to have lost my direction, but with a lot of help I think I am getting it back! Very beautiful piece! It speaks from the heart!-Erin -
Through these words of yours Shannon, I feel that all is not well with you. It's almost feels like a desperate cry... I hope all is well with you. Remember, when we can't see, feel or hear Him... He is still there, but by faith we've only to KNOW and believe that He is there with us. This poem is short but it says so much. Again, I hope all is well. God bless you. ~Melissa
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