Ol' Tom was groaning his song
looking for the heart of Saturday night
in a sixpack and dragging me along.
We saw Jesus in a wino's eyes
at the corner of Heart Attack and Vine
and bought a piece of paradise
at an off Broadway porn picture show.
Where Tall Sally in her orange hat
took me down that Gypsy Angel Row.
She said "Baby, I'll show you where its at".
It felt so right, just two spirits in the night.
Author notes
Out on the town to the sounds of Waits and Springsteen
Written January 4th, 2005
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I cannot believe that I did not read this one!
Very well done, Nefie. Gee jy skryflesse?
Love
Myra
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Awsome
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Very visual poem. gr8 flow. i am feeling the single line stanza. fresh. i like it
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Great little poem.... I love it!!! It is awesome!! Good... Great... Grand!!!
It is a cute little 'blast to the past'. My dad would like this alot.
~Katie -
A very sweet and charming read. Good flow and I got most of the references. Very cleverly done, hiding them. Takes me back to a Saturday night, long ago. Hot summer night, cool car, and laughter! Enjoyed this piece very much! Keep up the great work!
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Excellant and fun
Great poem. Reminds me of Seattle, many yrs ago, when porno row was opposite the Market on 1rst Ave.
There were some real characters on the Ave at night, back then I can assure. 'course I never went to the porno shows. Who, me? lol Great piece of writing. Thanks for the trip down memory lane to use a cliche. -
this is a great piece, there are so many secrets hidden within this piece, as well as secrets revealed, but not completely. GREAT moments in here, it made me remember the streets of St Louis on a saturday night wandering through the city to the theatre. seeing the homeless and trumpet players performing for pennies or maybe a dollar (ooh that's a good line - don't steal it!
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you have described the scene so vividly and in so few words, it is definitely impressive and excellent.
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When reading this I got the impression that "Tall Sally" is a prostitue. If she isn't I apologize to her, but come on who else would wear something as garish as a orange hat. I bet she had illuminous yellow pop-socks on as well. Nice imagery. Peace <3
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perfect details to make this come alive...bring the reader right along on your night out
this was pure fun to read and left me feeling a bit nostalgic
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This is a fun and nicely written read, pleasure!!
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Excellent
great poem refreshingly down to earth...flow was nice ...and you enterained your self with porn ..lol...well happy writing -
this is really good i like the flow and your choice of words. i didn't get all the references but i still enjoyed it.. hope that doesnt make me a fool lol ^_^. either way, really nice job
~taori -
I caught both Tom and Bruce before the author's comment so I guess that means it works. I like the beat this piece has. Short, succinct captures a feeling. Well done.
~Jan -
Sweeeeeeeet lil ditty. Takes the reader out on that sauturday night with you, very visual, well laid out. I could see it all, feel the heat of the night, as things warmed up a bit.
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sounds like tom waits. form a band.
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Yes it is a very entertaining read. And I got all the references.
I would look again at your last line though. Feels to me like you could add to it. -
I absolutely LOVE this.
Red -
Wow, I loved your imagery here- it was a cool poem A good write, keep writing because this was fantastic
All the best,
Pozo
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