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A Mother's Loss

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Crimson streaks wash down her thighs

silver down her cheeks

Creating pillow puddles

She lost him at 12 weeks


He was so real to her

Though others never knew

And she moans in shattered sorrow

as her son makes his debut


There will not be a funeral

with family and friends

And many do not understand

a mothers love transcends


It matters not to her

that he never drew a breath

Her heart belonged to him

and she wildly rues his death


She wants to strike the ones who say

get over it, move on

Three long years of doctors

and her first wee son is gone


Do not tell her life begins

only when a child’s born

She carried him in womb and heart

and she’s earned the right to mourn




Patricia Gibson-Williams

January 3, 2005

Author notes

I dedicate this to all the woman who post on the resolve.org bb who have suffered miscarriages.  It breaks my heart every time this happens.  This poem is not based upon any one person, but there have been several in the past few weeks who’s stories I followed for awhile and this is my humble attempt to imagine how it would feel to suffer such a grievous loss after years of trying to conceive.  Patti
Written January 3rd, 2005

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  • l.....
    October 12, 2005
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    Same reasons as before. "No".


  • Always Deena
    January 18, 2005
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    painfully true

    Great write...Having suffered such loss my self...your words ring true. It's been 5yrs for me...still miss my Miracle.
    Thank you
    *hugs*

  • RockStarAngel7
    January 14, 2005
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    This was a very wonderful write! My sister suffered a meiscarriage at about 3 months or so. It was really hard to get through. I went through a hard grieving time, let alone her. She carried that child that long, to lose him/her. It was awful. This was an excellent tribute! WONDERFUL JOB!!!!!


  • Ilati Aza
    January 12, 2005
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    This touched me greatly... I really wish I could cry right now but there's no way I could. It's hard to hear about others losses....I've had to go through this personally and these poems always touch me deeply. thank you for writing. really, thank you.

  • ThundRsOne
    January 11, 2005
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    nice work

    this poem is a wonderful write very sad subject i have a sister that has went through 3 miscarages she keeps making it to 9 weeks and i feel so bad for her because i know she wants this so very much we were all pulling for her and she lost it again her last one was only 2 weeks ago if that i was considering sending her this but i'm afraid it would push her to tears and tread up all the emotions she just got done going through but then again i don't know i know she has reached out to miscarage support groups based solely online i think its helped her quite a bit i hope that they either stop trying or find out if the problem can be fixed because she shouldn't keep putting herself through all this stress even though she wants to raise a child so very badly i don't know that she will have the chance i do hope so though and my prayers go out to anyone who has experienced this it has to be truly devistating ty for the wonder poem it did touch my heart


  • Skatermama14
    January 7, 2005
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    Great job!

    This is a great piece. Its very sad and makes me think if i ever lost a child if i had one. Your a great writer and keep doing what your doing because your masterpieces are a great insparation and thought to mind.


  • teamodios
    January 5, 2005
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    this is beautiful, divine, and marvelously worded. I love and adore this piece! Wow! I just don't even have words to comment on it... It's flawless. Great job.
    Susie


  • January 4, 2005
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    Oh Wow, this was lovely yet so terribly sad! It had great rhythm and rhyme, and the emotions in this just fly out. It nearly broke my heart, and I have tears welling up! Beautiful poem, thanks for entering, and Good Luck!

  • Intwine
    January 4, 2005
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    this was so good and so sad, i cant even imagine how much of a loss it must feel like to have a misscarriage, i know somebody who was pregnant and loved this child to peices, but financially she could not afford to look after it, or even the extra nourishment she needed to carry it. in the end after consulting doctors on what to do they told her she should have an abortion, at first she said no because she loved the child so much, but as she couldnt afford to look after herself properly she finally realised she had to go through with it. she's now in therapy to help her get over her loss. louise.

  • Naraku No Hana
    January 4, 2005
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    This is so sad and beautiful. You capture the sorrow so well. Brilliant write.

  • Phobophobia
    January 4, 2005
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    gosome

    it is 6:06 am and i'm too tired to critique it....it was good...applause for you.


  • Kate Riley
    January 3, 2005
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    ...I am at such a loss for words right now and to be quite honest, I don't think my comment will do it justice, as it was a truly touching poem. I have tears running down my face and my lips are trembling. I myself have never experienced such a loss, as I am not yet ready to have children, but I can only imagine what it would be like for a mother to lose a child like that. I do not care what anyone says, there is a special and unique bond that forms between a mother and unborn child, as the baby is a part of her. It is living, even though it is not yet outside the womb. Thank you for sharing this sorrowful, yet touching poem.


  • Lori1952
    January 3, 2005
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    WOW.. this is a very powerful poem and my heart goes out to those woman who have suffered such loss. I really dont know how I would react to losing a child before it was born.
    Good luck in the contest.. Lori

    PS. In your author's comments the second sentence is missing some words or remove the 'a'


  • twiceborn punk
    January 3, 2005
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    Beautifully Written

    This is by far one of the mest free flowing poems I have ever read.It had a topic not commonly used, a beautiful sticking rhyme, and I actually felt the emotions of the Woman.Being a man it should have been hard to understand this, but with your beautiful writing and alliteration you shined through and showed me true motherly love.Thank you for teaching me something.

    Prayerfully in His trip
    Donovan

  • Goodnight Raven
    January 3, 2005
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    wow your poem is heartbreaking.

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