To purchase winter
Autumn goes to market square
strowing coins of gold~
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Written August 30th, 2002
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Love this!!
Ooooooooooooooooh another Haiku~
Beautiful piece and what a trip to the market I say
Love this one too
Keep that quill dancing Sweet Soul
Best wishes to You Sis
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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thank you
Thank you all for your comments...
I have re done the haiku am hoping this is better
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Susan~ -
The imagery and theme of this is very nice, Sis and as always, you have the perfect picture with it
I'm going to send you an IM regarding haiku, though, as you've asked me to do. Please be sure to check your IM's
love and *hug8
Dee
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Awe sis this is wonderful However It is not in Haiku style
Only supposed to be 3 line. 5/7/5 syllables Great job though
delila
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Wonderful
this was wonderful sis. A great haiku about winter.
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I love the short vision of this and find it agreeable,
yet I like the form of haiku-- of nature, three lines
5/7/5 syllable count. This rather seems to me a form all of your own, and quite fasinating as it has a 5/3/4/2/4 count. Now if you had aliterion, rhyme or a meter that swapped line to line... like iamb/trochee/iamb/trochee it could add more depth and intrest.
I like it the way you have presented it and this is a sparkeling form. -Beautiful.
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hmmm haiku? a haiku is syllables in 3 lines of 5, 7, 5, perhaps there is another form of haiku that I am not yet familiar with? oh well, enjoyed the read...'to purchase winter' really opens the poem nicely -
thanks so much Windsong for the comment
Susan~~~ -
excellent
beautiful poem about my favorite season! -
don't touch it!
Autumn oh how I love it the colour the feel the purpose.
Totally delightful Susan.
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Berys -
Thanks so much for the comment Ce~
Blessings
Susan~~~ -
excellent
VERY creative and pretty Susan..Love your work as ever, :) ~ Ce
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