I try to call to you
But you cant hear me
Why cant you feel me?
You cant see me feel me
I wish you can communicate with me
Is there a way I can be heard
Anyway to be mortal?
[[Chorus]]
No one sees me hears me
I am not important
I am invisible now
Can someone hear me see me
Can I be alive now
Only I can hear myself
I wish I could reach out to you
But no I am invisible
There's only one way to change this
To call me whole again
So you can see me once again
And I am insignificant
Is there a way I can be heard
Anyway to be mortal?
[[CHORUS]]
Am I being missed?
Is there someone missing me?
I am not important
I am invisible
[[CHORUS]]
Why am I here?
If I cant be visible
Please someone stop this from happening
Author notes
Lost - This is how it really feels to be Invisible.
"Desire and flames"
Written January 2nd, 2005
(( Option Number Ten - For Contest "Lyrics!" ))
~ Kind of a Alternative Rock feel - with piano, guitar, and drums ~
‡ Inspired by "Missing" : Evanescence ‡
THE CHORUS IS:
No one sees me hears me
I am not important
I am invisible now
Can someone hear me see me
Can I be alive now
Only I can hear myself
I wish I could reach out to you
But no I am invisible
A contest entry
- Lyrical Genius by Welcome-To-Hell.
875 points, ended June 20, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lyrics! by PoetryDove.
600 points, ended June 29, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Missing [Lyric Inspired] by Pisces Pieces.
1750 points, ended July 24, 2007, 12 entries
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What did you think
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It feels to me like the soul trapped inside of it's body, pushed aside, ignored, longing to be freed, to be heard. Much of the time we don't listen to our inner self, and it is indeed invisible, and we do not even realize...
This certainly evokes a sadness and almost a longing. Someone should be missing this voice and someone should listen...it cries for that...
Great job with the song, best of luck!
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This is a great write, but very sad.
Many feel like this...I am one of them sometimes
A lot of the time you have an opinion or want to say something but people just don't care-I think many can relate
Or when you want someone to know something and they just don't take the time to listen.
Everyone needs to be heard and felt, or else it just stinks all together.
I like this because it's *real* and that's just what I love about it.
Awesome! And thanks for entering my contest
~Poetrydove~ -
Great Write
NICELY DONE! I can relate totally!
These are really good!
Edited on Aug 05, 3:39 p.m. because 'Whatever was written before was forgotten
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Great
Yes it has almost the chilling haunting feel of Evanescence music... I enjoyed this even though it was sad. I often feel "Invisible" but it is through choice rather than being ignored
Great song..I enjoyed very much 
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Ah! This was great. I really liked it, it was easy to read and connected with me. I felt so invisible (and I was....) to some people and now they notice me..I don't know why though lol. I don't care I don't put up with them. I agree I would love to hear this whenever you get around to it. Anyways keep on writing~
~V~ -
thank you for your comment
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i love this poem and i too kno how it is to feel invisble...keep up the good work
~ashley~ -
i remember reading this when you first entered it. you did a wonderful job with it..keep up the good work and best of luck
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Interesting piece - the original "Invisible Man" was really an allegory, so you have continued the tradition with this song.
I would probably like it more if I could "hear" it, however, the form seems a little irregular, so I am having a difficult time imagining how this would actually sound as a song.
Scott -
Nice! Good piece. Well written. This would be really cool sung, a sort of Gothic Rock piece!
Sometimes I wish I was invisible, then these people could not hurt me. Anyway, this is a wonderful piece!
~Achika~
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Yeah I know how it feels to be invisible. I was invisible for a long time until I met Chip and Angela (Angela is on here by the way) Everybody says that this song is almost like one of their poems or what ever. I just made this up last night when I was listening to Evanescence song called Missing. I love that song. Anyways. Yep, invisibility does hurt......alot!
UGAChik 
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This sounds like my life...I've even written one called "To Be Invisible" that is kind of like this. I really really like this. And it's nice seeing that someone knows how it feels. Invisible hurts.
Alicia -
It's cool
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i like this alot i wrote a poem similar to this one before i read this i love this a lot u put some great work into this...thanx for posting it
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Hey you guys the Genre for this song is rock. Just a lil info.
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