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She Senses…

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She swears that she can smell it

day after barren day

the acrid copper scent of blood

that washed her hopes away


She lets her fingers curl around

her slightly cambered abdomen

Yearning for distended flesh

that boasts of life within


She listens to the songs of birds

outside her window pane

Some days she fears their joyful trill

will drive her soul insane 


She watches as the colors wash

through summer, autumn… spring

and she cries for every bloody month

till the vibrant hues are tormenting


She tastes the bitter tears of loss

sour on her tongue

and she can’t forget the taste of dreams

she had when she was young


She wishes she could wrap herself

in ice or shrouding fire

and never have a single sense

remind her of desire



Patricia Gibson-Williams

January 2, 2005

Author notes

I’m not sure if this is exactly what you’re looking for, but your contest inspired me to write it, so I wanted to post it here.  Thank you for the inspiration.  Patti

I’d also welcome comments or suggestions for the title.

Written January 2nd, 2005

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  • sassie-86
    August 20, 2005
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    I can't image what it would be like to not have children. If i knew i couldn't i wouldn't be able to live..but everything will be allright...things will get better..this poem is excellent...
    ~Adreanna~


  • AngelSeeker silver member
    January 2, 2005
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    Yes it is... So far I have about 30 poems in the collection and I'm hoping that this year I can add some about how it feels to finally get pregnant. I have appointments this week with a new RE and an infectious diseases doctor who is hopefully going to tell me that the infection I got from my cats has cleared up and we can start trying again. Patti


  • painted veil
    January 2, 2005
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    is the stage poem you wrote for my contest in this collection?


  • Lipstick Trick
    January 2, 2005
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    this was a different entry. but that is not such a bad thing. this was a wonderful write. and i enjoyed reading it. it was quite sad. and i thank you for entering it. good luck to you


  • Just A Goddess
    January 2, 2005
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    this was amazing-and i loved the picture..went so well with the work!
    I loved:

    She wishes she could wrap herself


    in ice or shrouding fire


    and never have a single sense


    remind her of desire


    wow-powerful and flowing words laced with darkness, and angst..beautiful!


  • Romanee
    January 2, 2005
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    That is so sad, I can only imagine what it must be like to want a child so much yet can't have one, you described everything so well, it's gives me an insight, you did great job, good luck in the contest, luv Romanee, xx

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