There aren't many girls like muesli Kim,
who always seemed so nice and prim.
a pink dress, a ribbon and a smile,
which she could bare for queit a while.
But as she smiled and spoke with grace,
her mind was in a different place.
the voices in her mind once sed
if you could see inside my head
you'd see things which most despise.
Like spiders and worms and dead butterflies
all of which I enjoy sometimes to eat,
then spit out and squish to the ground with my feet.
I like to dream of my puppy, yes i do,
but I'm sure not in the way you'd like me to.
Then muesli Kim would smile and nod,
at the ugly next doors boy called Tod.
I'd like to eat your eyeballs please,
pardon?
I'd like a cup of hot halls please.
She smiled then twirled around to walk away,
to plot a way to make him pay.
Then disappearing underneath the stairs,
she collected her puppy's malted hairs,
then repeated a rhyme for a very long time.
She poked her small head around the stair gate,
and noticed the time was 9:48.
Her puppy emerged slowly from across the Flore,
then fell with a thud, and was alive no more.
Muesli Kim sat back with a smile,
this would keep her amused for quit a while.
Author notes
Written January 2nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Anyone by painted veil.
300 points, ended January 2, 2005, 27 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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LOL He he he. Very cool. Demented creepy goodness
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Wonderfuly creepy, I love it, Sort of reminds me of something I'd see in a scarey movie, I like it good job and keep up the awesome work.
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This one is ummm....
....different...
Decent flow, mediocre rhyme, (rhyming and working is a person-based thing- some people like it, while some don't.) not that well written-
-but the meaning to me is things on the outside are not always the same way on the inside- looks are decieving. That alone is enough for me to like it! I can relate. The route you took was not conventional...
So good job!!!
Sincerely...
Chad
Edited on Jan 02, 6:03 p.m. because 'I bloody wanted to.'. -
Ah, I don't get it. What is the point of this? I see a girl that is pretty on the outside and demented on the inside. Some of the wording in this is tough though.
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