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Trying to Conceive

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This is not how I imagined

trying to conceive.

I had the same loving dreams

that most young women weave


Yet, here I am laying back

in a faded cotton cover

A doctor stands between my thighs

where you should be, my lover


Life’s liquid in a catheter

inserted in my womb

We hope that it will find the egg

and life will start to bloom


You hold my slightly trembling hand

and softly stoke my hair

The doctor does all he can do

and we add a little prayer


I never doubt it’s worth it

but I often wonder why

What comes to others easily

so often makes me cry


I lay here on the table

for my 15 minute wait

and dream of steamy interludes

where we procreate


I mourn the loss of afterglow

wrapped up in your embrace

The wonder of believing love

is all you need for grace


The two week wait begins

as we walk out the door

and we’re filled with hope ~ but worried

that we’ll be back for more


I hate that it’s so clinical

when I wanted sweet romance

So hold my hand and kiss me

and lead me in a dance.


And I will close my eyes real tight

as truth; I fervently declare

“Our child will be a testament

To the love we share.”




Patricia Gibson-Williams

December 27, 2004

Author notes

Thank you for reading my poem. I hope it touched you.  I'm working on a book of poetry about dealing with infertility and would welcome any suggestions or comments that would help improve my poem.  I'm also not sure I'm happy with the title.  Patti
Written December 27th, 2004

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  • malvadadiosa
    January 3, 2005
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    Wow.Interesting concept of the poem.Keep up the good work.


  • Venessa
    January 3, 2005
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    Very emotional. the subject is unique. I like it when people write about something different. Thanks for entering.


  • jantastic gold member
    January 3, 2005
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    I apprecite this piece and the emotion it brings with it. A well-captured portrayal of a painful journey full of frustration, I like the hope in this one. I'm not sure it fits with the contest critera, but it flows well and tells your story effectively.
    Thank you for entering.


  • no1special
    January 1, 2005
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    Wow this is a great poem ...
    it is about somthing u wouldnt normally hear in a poem yet is was amazing
    I see no need to change a thing in this!!!
    ~no1special~


  • Mary O gold member
    January 1, 2005
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    You did well, describing the rose to a blind person. You put me right into your reality, a reality I would not have experienced. Wonderful job.


  • steveV
    January 1, 2005
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    Patti I was two thirds through this poem before I noticed your ryhme scheme, nothing seemed forced. This piece drew me in as if I were reading a story, it's written so clear. Kudos, I wish you the best in life as well as this contest...Steve


  • Enchanted Soul
    January 1, 2005
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    OMGosh this was such a beautiful poem... I loved it so much.. I don't know what this would feel like personaly, but I know I would feel terrible about it... this is so sad... I really enjoyed reading this though...

    ~squeekers, queen of the underworld squirrels and minoins~

  • Sweet Briar
    January 1, 2005
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    Wow this is a wonderful write. And written about something I can relate to.. I cannot have children on my own and have been trying to Conceive by other methods.. But so far we have had 7 fails.. But I know soon we will have that child.. What a wonderful write I really did love this.. It just touched my heart..

  • Drakus840
    January 1, 2005
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    Oi.. haven't seen anything like this in my AP travels thusfar, lol. I agree that the title seems a bit bland... maybe focus in on the clinical bland kind of technological thing versus its natural more mind blowing counterpart? Just a thought. Good work

  • reximer
    January 1, 2005
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    It's a well written poem. It makes it so others can feel what you;re talknig about.

    For some reason, a line from "Princess Bride" came into my head and I can't get it out.


  • masterblaster gold member
    January 1, 2005
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    This is a truely wonderful poem, I know your feeling, well done lass you wrote it to a T. well planned well presented flow that was great, it enchanted me, I will deffinately read more of you poems,and as to not forget I have made a note

  • fallendreams
    January 1, 2005
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    "I hate that it’s so clinical

    when I wanted sweet romance


    So hold my hand and kiss me


    and lead me in a dance.



    And I will close my eyes real tight

    as truth; I fervently declare


    “Our child will be a testament


    To the love we share.”

    this says so much. My heart goes out to you. You need no help with title or words. Your heartfelt emotion more than speaks for itself. I wish you nothing but the best of luck and any child that would be wanted so much can only consider itself a fortunate one.

  • Ka-Boom
    January 1, 2005
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    awww thats so beautiful


  • queenie
    January 1, 2005
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    i see not need for change within the poem.i applaud you for your cleverness and creativity.it has brought an unusual subject to a poetic understanding.i too have reservations about the title.

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