My precious, lend your ear to hear my tale;
my thoughts of you consume my hours and days,
the passion that I feel is like a gale,
confusion in my speech a twisty maze.
Emotion recommends a headlong course,
my head must overrule, my will contends;
I fear to use a word, it's lost its force
through others using it for selfish ends.
In high esteem I hold your every word,
your beauty and your laughter overwhelm,
opinions you express, the best I've heard,
in company with you is heaven's realm.
My being is for you, my gift is free,
oh will you also give yourself to me?
Author notes
published in the journal of poetic-voices.com, Illuminations Vol 1 Issue 2 September 2005
Written December 31st, 2004
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This is quite good. I really liked the descriptions and analogies, i.e. "the passion that I feel is like a gale,confusion in my speech a twisty maze",
though my favorite line is:
"My being is for you, my gift is free,"
a beautiful heartfelt poem. I really enjoyed this.
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Thank you, Paulette - I had already gained at that time some reputation for sonnets. This was written for a contest about love in which the actual word was forbidden.
I'm happy you like it.
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Lovely, lovely--if I may use a version of forbidden word!
In stately steps it walks around the issue that's at hand,
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Excellent
This is EXCELLENT Margaret. Poetic perfection in a sonnet. A lovely way to gently close the door to 2004 and reopen to 2005.
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What a way to close the 2004 page! Love is so strongly present in this poem, that it seems that the word love is written in every line. I guess that we don't need the word when we use the feeling in the right way
Simply lovely!
Kisses,
Mari
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This is just beautiful . You have expressed romantic love without the 'L' word and done so with passion and grace. The mood is intense and moving. This sounds like a difficult contest but you managed to make it look easy. Your couplet is so lovely that it made my heart ache.
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I recall that discussion, you contended that English has a paucity of words to describe love.
Thank you for your elegant capitulation! 
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One of your best sonnets
There are many good things to commend about this poem. Along with your usual grace in constructing sonnets -- this one really fits the rhetorical pattern of the Shakespearean sonnet extremely well with the first two quatrains setting up the “argument” and the thirs quatrain setting up the “resolution” and the final couplet “a closing” or “concluding” argument.
Many moon ago we had a debate, which I believe you won, about the inadequacy of the English language in regards to the word “love.” If ever there was any doubt about you winning that argument, you have successfully finished the debate here. -
Thank you Del! Happy New Year.
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Happy start, to a New Year
Nicely done, Margaret,
You maintained a lovely rhyme and rhythm throughout and complied with the rules. Your poem shouts of love without saying the "L" word.
2005 is just over an hour old here in the desert, and it has begun quite happily, now that I have read this.
Cheers,
Del
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Thanks Kayla! Happy New Year to you too!
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Many thanks for your comment and applause, LWW!
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Noice! What a way to describe it without saying it. And officially it is a new year here. So, happy new year. I'll celebrate this moment with a "I really enjoyed reading this poem as it was different than I've normally read but very well said."
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Wow! This was very good! It's quite tricky to write sonnets, but you did an awesome job at it! This was very well written! Great job and have a happy new years
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Thank you!
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You did it! Congratulations! Not using the word "love" in your sonnet, yet you conveyed love in almost every line. Obviously you are a real poet.
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Thanks avibard1, for your generous comment.
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This is a fine sonnet, thanks for sharing; i wish though, that i didn't read about not using the word love because it would have been fun guessing that. Regardless, this is a poignant piece in a difficult form that you breeze right through! Congratulations and best of luck!
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Thank you Gennelle, that is the reaction I was hoping for! Fortunately as time passes we are no longer overwhelmed!
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Grande Passion!
What a stunner to end the year on, Margaret!
I can't say 'wow', that's done to death too...
c'est magnifique!
This sounds so familiar, anyone who has ever fallen in love can relate to it. And it flowed so naturally, you didn't need that 'word' at all!
~ G
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