Take the time to notice me
Did you notice the time you took?
Take away what you just took
You just took away time
Time to notice more things
Notice the image not the picture
Can you imagine such a thing?
You can't
First you have to picture the image
Imagine that time took notice in pictures
Can time notice?
I notice
I can
I noticed that I took images away from time
Or is that the other way around?
I noticed that time took images away from me
So i have no memory
I also noticed that time took away my life
Because my life took time
---Am I making sense??---
Author notes
i derno..this really isnt something to get your hopes up about..i guess i was just messing around with some words and came up with this..so if it sucks..i really dont care for you to tell me it does..thanks much..Aida
Written December 31st, 2004
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i found this poem really thought provoking, but to be honest the thoughts i was thinking then got me a little confused but i think thats part of what makes a good poem, something that opens your mind's eye to things you may not notice! great poem!
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This poem is very good. An interesting write about time falling behind. Some of it is a little confusing, but very nicely done anyways. You did a really good job on this.
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I like this a lot
the strangeness of it all
the play of words
I would cut out the last sentence, it does make sence if someone doesn't understand, that's their problem.... -
I liked it!
Very good poem. I agree with it...Time really does fly! It almost reminds me of a short story I read recently called " Half A Day. " I don't if you ever read it before, but you might like it ( I personally did )...Great poem!!! -
Nicely Done
Only as confusing as living life every day. :-) You did a great job with capturing the way time slips away, far too often without us taking an image to bring along the journey with us. Well written, good job! -
Not bad, but a little confusing. I liked the wordplay, it made it interesting. It reminds me of one of those riddles that there is no answer too.
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this is very good poem, full of truth! Its a great write, i really like it, well done! rach xx
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wow this totally makes sense....it rocks
u did a kick-butt job
i like this alot BRAVO
love sarah-beth
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