where to go when hope is failing
dark pit, falling.. arms are flailing
kick and scream i try to fight
but he always wins, it's just not right!
let me go please let me be
clipped my wings when i tried to fly free
all is twisted, upside down
emotions spinning round and round
escape from bondage
must bite through these chains
misery loves company
his thoughts are derranged
why can't he just cut the noose?
push me away or let me loose?
i try to run he breaks my legs
def to listen what i say
indignation arouse my flame
she does not see that he's the same!
maybe this is just not real
but how to explain this hate i feel..
he enjoys my pain, to see i am a wreck
how it kills me so that no one suspects!
where is God as I go down?
all is black there's no one around
i know my boyfriend will do the best he can
but not even he can fully understand
into my breast he plunged his claws
and pulled out my heart with his terrifying paws
gnawing on the piece of me with razor teeth he'd hew
he spit it out and as it bleeds on the floor
you can still see where it's been chewed.
Author notes
i hate my step-dad, my mom is blind as to why, he's literally destroying my life, and so the story goes. i had to get it out. <3 heather
Written December 30th, 2004
A contest entry
- Imagery by Kazrith.
300 points, ended June 27, 2005, 11 entries
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awesome...u will get thru it hun....i love you!
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Phenominal piece once agian Heather! Very vivid and dark I could feel the disgust and pain and how disturbing this guy was to you. This was a fantastic write, if not already it should be entered in a contest. Well done Heather! A+
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excellent...and sad
i like the poem its really good.. heather if you ever need some to talk to or be there for you you can call me anytime day or night... if anything ever happens im here for you..<3 turkey -
ive read your biography and it seems like this poem is about your stepdad...he's a asshole...but anyways this poem is amazing and expresses your emotions with great detail and amazing imagery...this poem is beautifully well written...and no one should have to go through what you go through.....im not one to say because ive never been abused but if i was in your position i would threaten to call the cops on him...but im not in your position so dont take my words into offense...this is a amazing poem...great job
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Well Explained though!!
Continued doublets need a comma in the right places. Otherwise you need to stop the monotony of 'groaning' on, it kind of takes away the sympathy. By trying, 'let me go please let me be
clipped my wings when i tried to free myself, twisted yarn to upside down, emotions were spinning, round and around, yearning the escape of chains, through
scape from bondage
must bite through these chains adorn to misery to accompany the derranged thoguhts I need to cut loose, this noose..., etc etc.. amongst the doublets put intermittent free verse to establish not only feeling of anger you have, but to let the reader establish the onslaught of panic in those freefall, free verse uniques.
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