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Lying Through Teeth

She told me I died in her heart.
But still she sits crying as we grow further and further apart.

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Written December 30th, 2004

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  • LonelyDepressed
    March 15, 2005
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    I really liked that.. and I can't ponder the many time's ive said that.. and then cried..
    ..well, i dont know. i'm sure i had something else to say but i can't remember now.

    Chrissy

  • SamBam76
    January 26, 2005
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    OMG this is soo good and its only two lines...less really is more! :-) good one! xoxo


  • January 2, 2005
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    ooo random me likes


  • Pocket
    January 1, 2005
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    It's so lovely... you can put so much feeling into so few words. The title also adds more meaning to it. I know I've lied in that way.


  • Parearoo
    December 30, 2004
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    this sounds really sad weeping-Death. May I make a suggestion?? I really can't see the writing very well. Anyways, this was a great haiku. Keep up the good work.

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