Purple wisteria
cascades over my fence
on the word's breath
A spicy honeyed scent
soars heavenward
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Written August 28th, 2002
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There are so many wonderful descriptive words in this lovely piece that I could almost smell the lovely fragrance of this beautiful blossom. Thank you so much for sharing this treasure here! These little nuggests are among my favorites to ingest and enjoy!
Lily ~* -
beautiful.
I think it's beautiful. Nicely worded. Very visual. Regardless if it's a hakiu or not that's not mine to say... I can say I like it!
~Destiny~
Thanks for reading me as well, welcome to my journey of self-discovery. lol -
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Rules are meant to be broken! haha good on you. -Brandon -
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Very pretty and serene. (I recommend that you just srop 'haiku' in the title and then, voila, your form is fine!) -
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I breathed the words in and let them flow into my mind where they settled and gave me peace.
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Berys -
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Me too, Susan this is just lovely! I love...'On the word's breath..'
Beautiful line, very pretty!! Keep em coming kiddo! :) Best, ~ Ce -
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I like it...I also like the color purple!!!! -
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haiku or not, this is very beautiful! -
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MMMM...the senses of sight and smell. Love delving anything which tingles my senses. -
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Hi, Susan! Ivy Rose had said it well: you've got the heart of the haiku and that is very, very important - much more so than structure ... But it is good to KNOW the rules to be able to break it meaningfully ;) Hugs, Myra -
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You have captured the essence of Wisteria and painted a beautiful word portrait proclaiming its beauty and its fragrance. VERY WELL DONE!!!! Technically it may not be Haiku; but the essence of the poem is pure Haiku. ***Ivy Rose -
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What a beautiful flower ...A lovely lil write...It's just perfect the way it is....CaUsAL~...:*) -
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It is beautiful... I love purple wisteria, too.
Roury -
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Very lovely write, in so few words, and you captured so much. Beautiful Susan, you did a fine work here. Again, I'm always impressed with your writes and the beauty in your words--helps me know who you really are, a treasure, a true treasure. Love ya! ;)Kelly -
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I love short poetry. So difficult to get so much in with so few words. This is a nice write. -
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Sweet sis and now I havw two, boy am I blest I must say, I love purple and flowers, especially purple ones, their fragrance is always sweet. love it and picture. Now that I have anothewr sis, more inspiration to follow. -
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hey, this is quite nice. I like wysteria. yep, haiku is 5,7,5, but the principal of haiku is to describe a natural beauty. So, your 87% where you need to be. ;) -
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Lovely... nice visual :-) -
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Beautifully written, scents and sights enjoyed here. Thank you -tj- -
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Sis ..this is beautiful..haiku or not...lol..but watch out for my hayfever...aaahtishooo..whoops..sorry..sweet and beautiful write..~~~GILL~~~ -
Thanks for pointing this out Gayla i was wondering myself when
i wrote it i see i was right in the hesitating way to post it
oh well it's here i can just enjoy
Thanks hun no i am not offened thanks for the im
Blessings
Susan~~~ -
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needs rework
Susan, the poem is beautiful and fits the picture very well. Since you are asking for critical comments...
Haiku is:
5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables
I read 6 - 6 - 4 - 6 - 4
Now I may be all washed up, IM haikumonk, I am sure he would be the best one to help you out on this, I am sure he would be more than willing....
~Gayla~
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