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Driven

Outside
Marginalized
Thrust to the side
Forever out of sight
Trapped in societal confines
Locked in

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Written December 30th, 2004

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  • dontunderstand
    January 19, 2005
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    this is a very good poem.. i love how you used the words so well.. short but full of emotion.
    Truely,
    April

  • ChuckRak
    January 14, 2005
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    superb. another perfect example that you can say much with few words.
    Chuck


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    January 11, 2005
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    Society shall never have that power over me.

    Because of the fact that I will keep fighting it to my death or its, I shall be my own instead of giving in to the acclimated standards of others. Some people are so despondent that they will use any dearth as an excuse to give up. I will not.

    I love the power of this piece...there is an invisible force that just grabs you and forces you to see the light, in a manner of speaking. I know you probably don't have much time online these days, but whenever you get some free time, write to me. I wonder how you're doing.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • Venessa
    January 3, 2005
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    hehe glad to see you were able to break your block for us this certainly makes you think. thanks for entering!


  • jantastic gold member
    January 3, 2005
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    Interesting how we can be bound by our differences as well as our conformities. You certainly capture a lot in these few lines, a talent I appreciate. Thank you for entering.
    ~Jan

  • AVoiceWithin
    December 30, 2004
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    Nice!! this was kickass sw wonderful job
    Jenn


  • Diamond
    December 30, 2004
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    Poerful Write!

    It's really great how you've touched on some of the negativity of society in few short words. There are so many people around us who are "Driven" to such levels of indignity, and for those who aren't, society looks down on them, condemning them, driving them to the edge of insanity where they feel trapped or confined to the sad realities in which they struggle to live. Great poem Dee. Let me take this moment now to wish you a safe, happy, healthy and prosperous New Year. May all of your dreams and wishes come true. God bless you and yours, stay safe and see you next year.

    All my love,
    Avril

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