I feel the blood rushing through me
The veins, they break
Blood sprouts from it's seed
From there, it blossoms
Crimson flowers
Sprouting from my skin
Feel the sting
As it rains to make them grow
The crimson petals are blown away
And the flower dies from winter snow
There will be more crimson flowers
As the seed is planted another day...
Author notes
Don't cut. Seriously. Ever.
Written November 17th, 2003
Very old, as you can see. I thought it might fit though. Hope it's what you're looking for. The first line may be cliche, but...whatever.
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A contest entry
- Self Mutalation (cutting) by Aimee Dechow.
300 points, ended July 21, 2005, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Un-do the emo cliches by AutumnsFlame.
791 points, ended November 4, 2007, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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The comparison is just amazing, the image of blood escaping to the image of a flower growing because of the droplets of water. An amazing write. Well done. xxx
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I love it. Very very good.
<3 Rogu -
I have no complaints here. Comparing it to flowers was excellent. good job and thank you for entering my contest
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Thanks. Hope you don't get too many cliche'd attempts.
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I could tell you exactly what the poem is about, but then you wouldn't be able to interpret it yourself. 
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Ooo I like the background. Anyway, quite the picture you have painted in my head from this piece. In fact, it is making me think alot more than I think it should. At a first look, it appears like something much simpler, but after reading it a second, and third time, I seem to have found myself in a pile of different interpretations.
I don't know what it is about this piece but it is...mesmerising. Is that the word? I don't know but it just feels like...Wow. I, haha, I'm at a lost for words. Something so beautiful yet so little to say. It kind of speaks for itself really. I like it very much, it really makes me think haha. Great stuff sis, I know its a bit old but I'm glad I found it.
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Thank you. Good luck with judging.
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wow small and to the point it is awesoem and sdark in some way but i understand how you feell of course i do i am the one who started this contest lol well good luck i wish you the best
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Pretty much all I write is dark in some way, so if you like dark, you've definitely come to one of the right places.
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Wow. I love dark stuff and you defidently rock at it!
You're an awesome writer
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Yeah...I made a story for the blood and what I usually do. I'm glad you enjoyed reading. I was very contemplative when this was written. I liked the moods cutting put me in. ^_^
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Ooh. I like this. I especially like "And the flower dies from winter snow," though I really didn't get that part until you mentioned the tissue... but now it makes sense so okay.
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breath taking
you put a veil over the subject, cutting... and made it beautiful... so beautiful. i love it -
It's actually quite easy to understand in my opinion. But yeah...cutting, bleeding, water, and tissue. That's about it. Hehe...<.<;
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I think i fully understand it. But maybe not. Anyway. I know what i get out of it. Feh.
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I could fully explain this metaphor if I wanted to. I thought of it a while back while I was...doing the deed. <.<; And I mean cutting. But yeah, I wonder what you can get out of it.
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Hi. I liked this a lot. I think i can apply it to some things. Hm. But metaphors make me seriously happy.
Keep up the good work.
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Another fucking awesome poem, well done. I was blown away by the power of the imagery you created; wow. Great metaphors too but seriously, the language of this piece is like, 11/10; nice nice nice work!
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