This hollowness...
has taken over
my mind, body and soul.
I can't find an escape from it,
I can't just fill it in...
No matter how hard I try
it just keeps growing...
I don't know what is wrong with me.
I don't know how to stop...
Hallow, Shallow and Empty...
is what I am right now,
torture is what this seems.
I am sure this is a test,
I am sure I will get through it.
What I am not sure is why?...
Why I am feeling this?...
Especially when I have all I want.
Especially when I am doing what I want.
Especially when I am where I want to be.
I just want to know why?
Author notes
I just wanted to take this out. I feel like I have forgotten who I am and what I am. *sigh*
Written December 27th, 2004
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Meaningful and Superb.
I believe you have captured that feeling that comes when it seems we have nothing more to strive for. All dreams are achieved and we have that sinking feeling of dread. Why? It is my personal belief that we as human beings have a need to have dreams and be able to work towards them. So once all of our dreams are achieved than we find we have nothing more to look forward too. So the new chalange is to find a new dream and work towards that.
I personally am in this mode myself, for I have achieved all that I dreamed and am finding myself depressed and snappy. So I am in the process of seeking a new dream.
An excelent write. Your style is sound and the flow is beautiful. Thank you ever so much for writing this and putting into words that which seems imposible to do.
Blessings to you,
Rev. Alimae -
How is this that you can describe what I've been trying to grasp for my whole life, this was stunning
You truly are an amazing person and an amazing friend -And Mother
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nice lesson
sometimes when we think we have it all, we are missing the whole picture. -
"I can't find no escape from it". There's a double-negative in there, which completely cancels out what you're trying to say. However, I must say I enjoyed this, as it seems an emotional journey that leaves me a bit winded at the end, and somewhat thankful for having had the chance to read it.
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Sad, pain, love it! I wish you the best, my friend! This is loevly
Eny
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this poems has emotion. The last six lines are amazing and i love how it ends this poem. This write is very well written. It is sad, and is very heartful. I love your work, and enjoyed this piece.
-pasti -
This is sad yet beautifully written - each line builds to the next and explains precisely the sense you wanted to convey - This is superb in what it communicates - it is sad in the pain it reflects -
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