As I watch the winds carry our dreams away,
Upon clouds of silk, swiftly floating to a far off place,
Where we danced all through the night and day,
Our reflections cast on the waters of the Nile
Together we shall glide,
Captured forever in that place,
Drifting upon the winds of time.
During the course of my journeys
I have not forgotten you,
Forever laughing beneath that desert sky,
I remember those few days when I was yours,
And you were mine.
Memories of you and I, hand in hand,
Running barefoot across the sands,
We lay together, watching the sun sink far beneath the horizon.
Knowing that love was all that we would need,
As the land grew dark, shadows invisible in the night.
Little did I know that it would be the last time,
When I woke you had gone.
I stood alone, in the crimson glow of a new day.
In my dreams you’ll always remain.
Together we shall glide,
Captured forever in that place,
Drifting upon the winds of time
I have not forgotten you.
Author notes
I've chosen option #3
"As swiftly as a flaming twig goes out over a waterfall of tears" I read/commented on "Gabriel's Hauntings"
Written December 25th, 2004
A contest entry
- Hopeless Romantics ONLY by dragondancer.
300 points, ended December 29, 2004, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Superb Write!
As soon as I began to read, I was transported right to the Nile river, could visualise two people, hand in hand, two people who have known a closeness that only lovers know, laughing together beneath a dessert sky. The dessert always has such vivid colour no matter what you may be looking at, especially would the moon be big and glowing, a firey orange ball hanging low in the sky, casting it's glow upon the faces of the two young people who stood so close together enjoying the moment and each other.
Sad to say, it seems it was not to be, yet the memories will always be there to reflect upon.
Great Writing,
Well Done!
~Katie~
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Haha, thanks! I wish it had but oh well, more important people seem to enjoy it (yourself and others)
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aww.... this shouldve won
here's a trophy
II
ash
Edited on Jan 02, 5:47 p.m. because 'trophy keeps dissapearing'. -
Good
Wow....Amazing. I can imagine two young lovers racing through the lands of the Nile...perhaps wearing Egyptian clothing (basically because it's the first thing I associate with the Nile). Amazing way of telling a story. Gave the write a sense of dreaminess, though not enough to call it one. It seems to sit rather comfortably half way between this and the dream realm.
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