Should the Poet freeze
when the fires die down
the spittle clumping
on the hem of his gown?
when the words
are tricks of the mind
like toys lying in the attic;
should he
pay attention to the static
crackling embers
of the fallen timber
when Love is just the corner of the room
where the yellow chair lies?
the broken brittle flowers
lie on top
the grimly glowing coals
their fragrance
overcomes the gloom
at times
but it is just a passing thing
a hint of something more
hiding in the room
where the Poet sits
gazing at the wispy plume.
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Written December 27th, 2004
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This was gorgeous... I adored this poem to pieces.. So full of imagery and vivid emotion.. I could clearly see the room and the poet sitting alone.. silloueted through the dark.. I dont know if that is right, but that is what I felt with the lines of this wonderful poem.. I am impressed to say the least. I will definetly read more of your work. I wish you all of the luck possible in all that you do. You have imense amounts of talent and I am glad that you have shared that with us here on AllPoetry.
Amy -
Wow.. this reminds me a lot of something I would hear The Fray sing. (which is a good thing.) lovely word choice and somehow your words have spoken to me in such a way that i feel like i want to know you! lol. that's wierd. anyways, as you can tell, i really liked it. wonderful job, keep it up!
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Standing ovation
Very skillful use of vocabulary and imagery within this piece. I can see an old man at his desk, parchment in front of him and an antique quill pen. Struggling to find inspiration again.
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Hmmmm....Interesting. I don't really understand it, but its interesting. The imagery is beautiful, though, and well done.
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I really like this one!
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I'm blown out of the water. Your rhymes were nicely woven in-- they weren't obnoxious at all, but rather added something to the poem. The words flowed nicely-- I can't find any room for improvement at all.
Great job... keep it up!!
Elizabeth
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this has a nice flow and tone to it. it is well done. a good read to it.
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I liked this a lot. Good flow and wonderful imagery.
These are my favorite lines:
when the words
are tricks of the mind
like toys lying in the attic;
should he
pay attention to the static
crackling embers
of the fallen timber
They are beautifully written. Good job, it was a pleasure to read. -
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Beautiful,just beautiful..very nice structure and really emotive.Take a bow! -
good job!
very pretty with a gentle rhythm that flows nicely~jag~ -
Lovely poem...nice flow...beautiful..thanks for sharing
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brillaint poem, i loved it!!
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AWESOME OUTSTANDING TERRIFIC FANTASTIC ...sor
Beautiful Write , Really nice flow and structure...
Keeping Writeing
Ashes
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wow this is excellent, i really like this poem, and the flow of it, and the first line is really great, lol i cnt say much more... well done, rach xx
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-mouth drops open- wow, so perfectly put. the title fits nicely and the poem flows really well. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
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So pretty .. rooms and wispy plumes. Did I tell you I love this:
That the future is a faded song, a Royal Rose or a lavender spray
Of wistful regret for those who are not yet here to regret
Pressed between yellow leaves of a book that has never been opened.
And the way up is the way down, the way forward is the way back.
Yes. Embers are pretty but I need more its 11 degrees and I have not heat. And my time is officially up. The next person is here to use the computer ....
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That fucking yellow chair can never be counted on for the truth. This is brilliant.
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GREAT WORK
GREAT WORK! I rather liked the description in this piece. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!
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Too rarely someone actually looks at the poet as a potential subject of a poem, Im glad to see someones breaking the norm, You have a very good poem here, congradulations.
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I don't like poems about poets or poetry. This was an exception.
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Will the embers ever die, whether of inspiration or love? Enjoyed reading this piece though the comparison of words (as tricks of mind) to toys lying in the attic flummoxed me a bit.
krishna
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