Broken completely
Ripped out is my heart
Opened and gutted of it's insides
Kindness has vanished from all I know
Even caring has left me astray
Nothing in this world can piece me back together
Beyond repair is my shattered soul
Empathy is nowhere in my pained sight
Your love and nurturing has disappeared and I am left alone
Only to lie here and rot in my eternal sadness
Never to feel love that I have dreamed of over and over
Despair is all I will ever know
Reckless tearing at my fragile flesh
Eternally is the pain and heartache of my reality
Perhaps I will never heal and never be free
A broken, shattered soul and heart, bleeding forever
Is what I will always remain to be, even in death
Relentless is this torture that I will forever endure...
Author notes
Written December 26th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- True Love or Pain by Longhorns05.
300 points, ended January 6, 2005, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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It jsut takes practice, and believe me, I had a lot of that. Thank you for your comment.
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thsi si amazing i lvoe acrostics is it hard to link more than one word? i tried it once but it wasnt so great i hope ill be this good someday
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This was a very powerful stronge wright i could feel your pain in your words this touched me great wright you did a beautiful job.
much love
EE -
Wonderful job, i love how you wrote this out it shows alot of thought and also makes since like a free write.
Jared -
umm enteresting. You did a very good job. I hardly ever see poems like this turn out. and some how you managed it. The lack of rythem was interesing, and the topic was so free. Once again great job.
~Hippie~
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ohhhhh, this one is gooood. Dark and enticing, descriptive and vivid in my mind. Excellent use of wording and the overall structure works well. The non-rhyming scheme is brilliant. Fuckin kool....i'm jealous lol.
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Amazing wording and style for it..
It really is deep and beautiful with its meaning and metaphores...and I really can relate to it alot since thats how I feel in the moment and have always felt..broken beyond repair..
Loved those lines:
"O nly to lie here and rot in my eternal sadness
N ever to feel love that I have dreamed of over and over
D espair is all I will ever know
R eckless tearing at my fragile flesh
E ternally is the pain and heartache of my reality
P erhaps I will never heal and never be free
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Wael -
nice!
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