And the checkered knave did shrill and cry
The bloody raven was no more, it had expired and died
Black as the black hole hollows in a white skull's eye
The contrast emphasised the duality of the apparent signs in the sky
And the race of wolves did manage an orchestrated howling
The dead boxer's seconds,had almost threw in the red blood towelling
And the rampant full moon, silhouetted off the blood on the wooden rack
As the observers observed and managed to take panic attacks
This was in bewteen the crowd bloating and staring and munching on their fast food snacks
What did they mean? What did they say?
Was this a portrayal of the well known Nativity play?
The three leading lights took the Earth's centre stage
Overtook Venus as the morning star and the rage
And realised that most did not understand, what they were seeing
There were believers really there but not really believing
And the tempters were doing a great job on the deceiving
Look through the lights for more signs in the sky
Look for the celestial kissing our butts goodbye
The rain will fall soon as the golden light
On the pure and the impure and those hiding out of sight
And he will come again on the green grass of this earth
A second coming, a second birth
Man will then realise the folly of his mistake
For being continuously lead down the path of the snake
And we will all feel doomed, as the witch caught and tied to the stake
And the spirit of man will be judged and most will break.
Georges.
Author notes
Written December 26th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- The End of The World by Ishvara.
300 points, ended March 10, 2006, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tell Me a Prophecy by FallenAngel09.
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Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I liked this poem, it did have all the elements that I specified in the rules. I did think the lines were a bit too long for my taste and the rhyme seemed forced in places, but other than that, it was a good poem. Great job and good luck.
Your Host,
Tiphanie -
Very well written, different to most entries, very good imagery and references.
Thank you for entering and good luck
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agreed, very impressive, strong emotions and message here
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so much emotion! long, but good. very unique! bravo. i liked it. best of luck in the contest, and keep penning!
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Awesome- you always have such a unique take on things. LOVED the imagery in this piece. Can't say anything bad about it
-Ceilinh -
Thank you for entering.
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This was a beautifully written poem. The rhyming and the wording flowed nicely. It reminded me of Edgar Allen Poe's writting style/era. And the metaphors worked nicely as one person said previously. Beautiful work, I'd love to read more.
Echo -
....It was good. I loved the ending though, it was perfect and brought it all together. ^^ very insightful.
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This is great! I love poetry with feeling, and this DEFINITELY has that!
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wow! that is really cool. im not totally sure that i got it all, but what i did i liked. it was lengthy, but worth it.
~Tiffany -
nifty
your expression is wonderful -
interestingly old and new!
definetley a different well expressed, poem....much enjoyed by this lil girly!!!!lolz. anyways...until next time...
You know you love me,
Lauren -
cool
I liek this poem, it is very descriptive!
good imagary!
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Very impressive! ..
I like this one alot!
Keep up the great work!
~no1special~ -
stellar
again.. i am fully impressed.. i felt twisted and turned in this piece. it posesses a great deal of meaning. thank you for being such an extraordinary poet. -
naja dass ist echt eine wurstchen
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chalk full of metaphors and perfect rhyme scheme, i loved this poem. it was good, 9 out of 10, a really good write!
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As the observers observed and managed to take panic attacks
There were believers really there but not really believing
Look for the celestial kissing our butts goodbye
For being continuously lead down the path of the snake
I picked out these lines because they struck me as so... clever. I am envious of them
This write made me think about how I was raised, hearing every day that Armageddon was immanent... to the point that I felt guilty if I dreamed of a future, because I felt like that was a manifestation of my lack of belief in God's prophesies, and the signs were all around... earthquakes, famine, wars...
I was in my 30's before I realized that man has been looking for signs of the end of the world, ever since the beginning of the world! It was actually a comfort to me to learn about how Montezuma had fallen for Cortez, because he fulfilled all the signs of their prophesy. I saw that I was in good company. 
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We must all stand and be counted at some point. A lot to absorb in this, very intense. Enjoyed this very much, I will read more of your work.
Myalia -
The only thing I didn't like was the kissing our butts goodbye, because there was a very high tone to this and it read perfectly smooth until that phrase came out of no where...
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Interesting. The ending was not entirely expected.. although I am sometimes quite inept in understanding poetry. I do enjoy your play of words and the "lay men" phrases stuck in to provide emphasis of our morally debased society... as i said.. interesting.
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Very profound... left me with a lot to think about... well written. I don't think I've ever read anything like this before... I enjoyed it. God bless you! **smiles** ~Melissa
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Beautiful write Georges. I mean, absolutely beautiful. I do like reading all of your work but as of late it has just struck gold with me. I love it! Keep it up man! I'll be around to read, even if it takes me awhile. Love always,
Kristen -
wonderfull vivid
Powerful stuff here, Georges.
I felt mixed-vibes coming out at me when reading this.
A generous concoction of dark imagery together with a few
home truths tossed in for good measure. I feel a different messiah coming this time - one full of wrath and animosity at the mess mankind has made of this world...
And it amazes me how
you manage to get it all to rhyme so wonderfully!
Excellent work here, as always.
Best wishes ~ criss
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This poem was just full of imagery and wonders. it started out calm then it got stronger and stronger. Another brilliant poem by YOU!! yay!
-nicci -
Great!
Utterly profound, Georges!
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Good work
Once again, brilliant work. I really dont know how you do it. Definately a bit different than the other things I've read from you, but interesting none the less. -
this ws very intereting and a bit diffrent write coming from you. none the less the metaphores are great as always and th message cear. well done yet again
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cool! This poem is very good. It is very detailed with lots of imagery. This is the second coming of Christ right? That's what it sounds like to me. Very true. The whole poem was really good but I especially liked the last half of the poem the best. It brings out the conclusion very well. But what is really hard to do, is that even though you had long lines in the poem, you still managed to make it ryme. Very excellent work!
God bless,
Spring Rain -
this is confusing, but I like the and thens and the other begining parts of the lines
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I will never be able to offer anything that says more than the good Dr. said so just put me down for a ditto. This is marvelous.
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Beautiful poem, even though - truthfully - I didn't quite understand some of it. The flow of the words was wonderful.
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beautiful! Yah, I agree that it is the second coming of Christ..What did they mean? What did they say?
Was this a portrayal of the well known Nativity play?
The three leading lights took the Earth's centre stage
Overtook Venus as the morning star and the rage
And realised that most did not understand, what they were seeing
There were believers really there but not really believing...
beautiful! nicely done! some of it, I kinda got lost...i didn get the kissing our butts goodbye...but you did an awesome job with description! keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gem~chan
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beautiful write! U absolutely enjoyed it!
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Slow to start off, in my opinion, but here's where it catches up (and boy, does it ever!):
What did they mean? What did they say?
Was this a portrayal of the well known Nativity play?
The three leading lights took the Earth's centre stage
Overtook Venus as the morning star and the rage
And realised that most did not understand, what they were seeing
There were believers really there but not really believing
Ah, this is just simply brilliant. The words are so fluid that I find myself rhyming where there wasn't any.
Overall, this was pretty good. I felt as if you skipped around too much; your use of one stanza is kind of menacing as well--it makes the poem, as a whole, sort of phlegmatic and uninviting.
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JUPITER.... and the three magi did know exactly what the sign meant because they were watchers of the portents in the sky.
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I think I had a heart attack and died when I read the line: The bloody raven was no more, it had expired and died"
It made it so hard to concentrate on anything else. I take that as a personal attack!!!!! LOL Okay, maybe not. Wonderful poem
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grinz wickedly yup.. I can see Leonard here... your poetry is brilliant.. making absolutely no sense at all and yet all the sense in the world. I think my fave part has to be what I call the last stanza starting with "man will then realise..." that bit sent shivers down my spine... I'm gonna keep an eye on your stuff... keep an eye out for comments from me the gr8 Sephy
Rebecca -
awesomely spiritual
It seems to speak of the second coming of our Lord, jesus Christ into this world and some signs that fortell it !Christians strongly believe in this as the 'Last judgement-Day'when Christ in all His glory as Son of God will come upon the earth with Angels and deliver judgement on all people, dead and alive!No one escapes this !And the wicked will be sent to hell along with the devils while the righteous will be ushered intoheaven by angels!Well said in poetic style that is a bit difficult to understand by the less trained eye!well done spiritual write!
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