Radiating a dark aura,
Of seduction and charm,
Is a being of beauty,
Who will do you no harm.
Body of a goddess,
Red eyes of fire,
Entrancing your mind,
Filling you with desire.
Leading you away,
From the noise of the world,
To claim you as hers,
Around her finger, you curl.
Succubus
Author notes
For a contest. Enjoy. 
Lady S, you can put it this poem in whatever page you want. I give permission for anything you want to do with my entry. Except plagerism. lol.
Succubus - a feminine version of the demon, Incubus. Also considered female even though the name is masculine in latin demonology, I think. She's known as a seductress.
Written December 25th, 2004
A contest entry
- Demonic Enlightenment by Demon God.
500 points, ended January 17, 2005, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Cool poem. It's dark and very pretty. The rhyming was pretty good also.
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me gusta mucho. lol in otherwords i liked it alot...but who is succubus? am i missing something? other than that i liked it alot! thanks!
~Linds -
omg, thats great. i love how u make the poem as if the girl being described is the girl in the picture. i rele like this poem. im applauding u teehee ^_^
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This was really good. I love the picture, it really fit with the poem. As I read this, I could see this beautiful woman claiming men and taking them into her world, and then leaving them and finding another victim. This was wonderful!
Always and Forever,
~Kendal -
Ahn. ^^""""
Thanks, I'm honored to win the golden trophy for your contest. I didn't think it would win the GOLD one. My guess was a bronze or silver but gold is a rarity for me (so says my author page trophy cabnet. lol) You hosted a great contest.
-Michelle
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You did a good job bringing to mind the succubi and the way she works, in three stanza's only nonetheless. Not a perfect flow, (world-curl rhyme), but otherwise nicely done. Congratulations.
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Very good. ^_^ I agree with empty-thoughts. Eh, don't mind if I don't say much. I just started back at school and I'm a bit brain dead, if you know what I mean. lol. Can't put everything I wanna say into words. Good luck in the contest! ^_^
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Lol. Dont jynx me, now! Thanks for commenting. Glad you like it.
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hey great poem it flowed really well and drew me in and kept me reading from the first line to the last.... great job... (and i think u will win the contest) haha since ur the only 1
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ME
MEOW MIX!!hahahahahhaha flying penguins and chickens dive
hi im sorry..i took alittle to MUCh medication!! its jessi^^
i made one..and now you need to help me damn it! i cant figure anything out and my thing looks like crap! lol help me mommy!! meow mix meow mix please deliever skips away singing thats song
XxXx
jessi -
Wow Deep poem which I liked a lot, it was excellently written Amazing poem, very dark and mythological
All the best,
Pozo
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A Greyhound bus????
Okaaaaay, then. Thanks for commenting. Glad you liked it, Dan. I got the pic from one of Kimberly's stories collection lists. 
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Succubus.....ummmm.... what a way to go! I'd choose a succubus over a greyhound bus any day! Nice little poem here Michelle. I thought it was going to be gruesome..... I'm glad I was wrong. Nice pic too!
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its like Santa Clause or the easter bunny. The New Years Baby is supposed to be the symbol of the new year..you know baby..a new human..new year..a new year..get it?
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Heh..'Fraid not. Never heard of it. What is it?
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you dont know about the new year baby?..your weird.
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Thanks, Bish!
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Wow... you are one of the best dark writers I know of.
Love the picture, makes the poem all the more interesting and gives a visual to the person reading it. I don't think I could have hair that long though; pain in the ass to brush, shower with, blow dry, you know, all that and such. LOVE it. And good luck with the contest!
~Bishonenkoi
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Thanks, Kimberly! I'm happy that you think its a winner. My dad was alittle freaked when he saw me typing the poem up. He's like "Don't get too into the demons and such. I've seen what happens to people when they get too interested in it. It goes from a hobby to an obsession and before you know it, you're trying to summon a demon"
lol. I have more control than that. Thanks for commenting.
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New Year what???
lol. Thanks for commenting Kikyo. Glad you like it and yea, I bet the long hair is hell to brush. lol. Merry c-mas. happy new year.
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Well, well , well my little lovely... what do we have here? This is a pretty darn good write my friend. You certainly are growing in leaps and bounds as a writer my sweet friend. I am very impressed. Looks like winning material to me!
~Kimberly -
wow that long hair must be hell to brush when it gets tangled up!!! Lol anyway this is indeed a great write. Merry x-mas and a happy new year!!..whoa..2005..that New Year Baby must be an old on huh? Lol Anyway yeah.
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Speechless..
AWESOME write ....
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Thank you, er...Lunatic. Interesting name. I think I'll swing by and take a look at your work.
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wonderbread
lovely, absolutely fantastic write. i thouroghly enjoyed it. it was dark, but tatsefully so. keep up the great work, i be waitin for new posts by u! oh and if u get a chance, come to my lair and check out some of my stuff. i could use some advice. later.
-Lunatic -
Thank you, Raven.
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interesting poem.
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Thank you, clear. I'm glad you like it. Now if I can only figure out who put it in the featured list.
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nice. such a dark poem....beautifully written.
I loved this. Well done. I enjoyed reading it.
t/c.
*lex -
OoOooo, Mistress, huh? You serve me, huh? Well, then. I'll have to make use of you. Swab the decks, me hartie!! Arrrg!!
Thanks for commenting, Van. I'm glad you like the poem.
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mmm yummy.. i learned young women rule men but this was a amazing dark poem.. great work and keep it up.. and remember mistress i serve u.. lol hehehe
~VanGuard
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