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break

hello there
she screams silently and wasted
her words so close to her she tastes it
and now she speaks them almost to my face
politely
asking for relief from struggle
she runs away for hiding
afraid, alone, but setting her own pace
she stand up
shouting in an empty room
with rubber walls, rubber roof and floor
she confuses
reality for dreaming
and faith for hope of one day wanting more
shes torn
herself and all her victims
she pulls her hair and stumbles to the ground
relying
on meds and analyzing
underestimate her beautiful breakdown

Author notes

im sorry if it makes no sense to you as i realize that is a possibility but it made perfect sense to me as a i wrote it
Written December 25th, 2004

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  • its-just-me
    December 25, 2004
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    haha omg i realize after reading this post writing that it IS disturbing it was not meant to be as i wrote it but hey i still love it


  • December 25, 2004
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    Wow, that was great. I really enjoyed reading it, though it was more than slightly disturbing.

    I loved it.

    Merry Christmas.