The Play
SEEN 1
At RISE:
(Spurious sensations: waves
Received by the pallid Sage;
IRIS, near 35, looking out
Her bedroom window.
Rods reel in—tone, tint, tinge
Before the curtain is raised. )
IRIS
Tainted curves registering reality—
What nerve!
To view the world upside down
Only to turn it around.
(looks to sky in wonderment)
fade
SEEN 2
At RISE:
(A cast of cones cultivate color
When light enlivens the stage.
Around noon. Outside the bedroom.
DREAM LOVER, near 35,
Creeps coyly closer
Compelling convergence
Disrupting deception detection
Blurring his imperfections.)
IRIS
YOU ARE SO BEAUTIFUL
TO ME.
fade
SEEN 3
At RISE:
(DREAM LOVER
Slyly sneaks across
The window plate
Causing refraction
Acrobatic diffraction
Illusion bends and
In the end
It seems he's halved.)
DREAM LOVER
Even when I am only half the man you deem?
(stares seductively at Iris)
You deserve so much more.
fade
SEEN 4
At RISE:
(Immense, or even
The slightest interference
Calls for ad lib adherence.
IRIS stifles a laugh.)
IRIS
Yes, I'm smart enough to know
What I see now is just a tiny glitch.
fade
The lights go out
And the seen ends
Without a hitch.
Author notes
Written December 24th, 2004
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I have never tried a to write a play before let alone even think of one poetically. That made this even better. With the alliteration and the metaphors it made it even deeper than it seems. I think the play on words worked very well. Maybe I'll think about thinking about trying to think about writing a play a one day
I might leave it to you professionals though!
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Hey, Holly...the poem is a play on the life of an eye(Iris). "Seen" instead of scene and so forth...Hope you get it now. Thanks for commenting.
Edited on Dec 24, 1:09 p.m. because ''. -
Ok, I barely understood anything about thius "play" lol. Well,im not a big fan of plays, I have to put that on my author page.
I liked the 35 year and the goddess isis? nicen I dea in this poem
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-Holly "trueblues" O'Donnell -
Very clever. Each "Scene" evloves into the other quite well. Your alliterations are nicely placed, and the descriptions are vivid. As is, this is fine, but with a little work could devolpe into something very witty. I have been acting professionally for almost 19 years and yes, I could see this staged!
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