Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Mashed Metallica

Missing image


Concrete, blood, punk, trash-

Icons from a new age bash

Synthetic fibered molten key

Stuck in the wall for all to see.

 

Caution- burnt words hanging here

Recite them and you’ll slowly die

Chains, bags, dead poet's tapes

Holding decades of magnetic lies.

 

Gray, white, yellow, red

Colors of the unborn turned

And finally mashed metallica

Retrieved from vagrant cities burned.

 

Like those who came on wings before them

This new wave splats the mess together

They look at it in abject wonder-

It reflects their young lives' stormy weather.

 

“We were here” it loudly screams

Two messed up lives are strewn in it;

From start to finish a bunch of crap,

and with that said, I see me in it...


Author notes

This poem is from the perspective of the passing from one generation to the next generation in today's music, where one dies and another is born, in this case heavy metal from its death throes in its magnetic tape crypt spawning punk; and two older heavy-metallers criticizing the young punk piece, and then seeing themselves in it.
Written December 23rd, 2004

In a list

A contest entry

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 11 of 11

  • stainedillusion
    May 12, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    sorry its taken me so long to come and take a look but this is a really creative piece on modern art, the poem gives an interesting perspective and is very well written,


  • BeautifulKyrptonite
    April 27, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    very interesting indeed, i enjoyed reading such work as this, metallica is the shit and always will be til thier dieing day, in which will never happen for all eturnity ther shall last.


  • wbiro gold member
    February 18, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Thanks for the shiny metal thing and points! If you read the blurb it was about the passing of Heavy Metal to Punk. I was spawned from Heavy Metal!

  • Death To Emo
    February 18, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    damn, your good. I love the picture, it goes really well with the poem. all of it is awesome, the best one I've seen so far.

  • Funshine0701
    January 3, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    wow definitely interesting, which is good. i liked your poem drowning in tears, but it wouldn't let me comment on it. i like this one! definitely original! Serena


  • -a7x-
    January 3, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    That was forking awesome!! Great job and good luck!!
    -CoLe


  • Azazel
    January 2, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Nice, me and my friends still find time to jam out to Metallica inbetween Slipknot and Tool, arent we such glorious losers. I like this piece, nice, reminds me of my friends and I when we first started rock'n.


  • dearjealousyx
    December 26, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Lol, we asked for your interpretation and you gave it. And to be perfectly honest with you, I think it was a wonderful interpretation.. I like to see how differently people see things.

    -Kayla-

  • wbiro gold member
    December 24, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    And to be perfectly honest, I thought two guys made the work of art! If I had known a femme hand was in it I probably would have gone all melty and mushy and... well, my poem would have been less edgy and cutting... I would have used less testosterone perhaps, not being in a such a mindless primeval reproductively competitive state...
    Edited on Dec 24, 9:34 because 'of a fatal penchant for fiddling'.

  • wbiro gold member
    December 23, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    the yellow, no, I read you bio later! It balances the 'caution' tape... but I did have fun writing it! It began as a piece on punk culture, but evolved when the word 'metallica' slipped in there when I was trying to describe the twisted metal looking thingies...
    Edited on Dec 24, 9:27 because 'of a fatal penchant for fiddling'.

  • dearjealousyx
    December 23, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Lol, yellow is fine.. seems you did it just to poke at me though. And permission granted.. I like how you inverted the colors and put it as a background too. Anywayz, great interpretation of the poem! Not at all what we were thinking, but it really fits! I also like how you ripped at it, and then realized you were a part of it. Well written and good luck!

    -Kayla-

1 - 11 of 11